this was absolutely beautiful ! the smut was tasteful and the leading up to it was so natural that I was actually aching more for the development of their relationship after this than the tasteful smut ! thank you for the story !

OK. That last line got me. I literally almost snorted my drink. That aside, I really did like this one and I think you did a really good job with Haru.

Okay I'm a swimmer and I really enjoy you're stories especially the itasaku ships }

But I've been swimming for around 12 years and swim suits are worn so it's really skintight. Like hella tight, so when I try to take it off it legit hurts, and it leaves red marks because of the tightness. So taking it off and putting it back on is legit a task that takes at least 10 minutes. And if I'm in the pool then I would have to get out and put it on because of the problematic barriers I would face from the water.

This had been just bothering me, but other than that I really enjoyed the story especially when Hiroko was feeling the sensation of the water. TBH personally, I've felt that plenty of times, but it was really difficult to actually describe that sensation , and for you to actually put that into words. I'm just so amazed.

5

welp i have a new ship now xP
beautiful fic 3

This was nicely done.

I LOVE THIS. I LOVE. Please write more HaruGou stuff. You're writing is so beautiful I just can't- Thank you for this.

Thanks for adding such a great fic in the Haru/Gou fanfics!

I really enjoyed reading it. The writing was beautiful and mature, the pace was slow and languid (which suited Haru well) and the characters were wonderfully in character (something that doesn't happen very often in fanfics). I loved the descriptions and the way we could easily follow Haru's thought process. The relationship between Gou and Rin was also very cute.

Now, on to some constructive criticism. I'm not sure doing it in the pool was a good idea, for sanitary reasons (especially in the pool they have practices in). Also, senpai should be spelled with an 'n' rather than 'm'.

I'm sorry if I was being nitpicky in my criticism but I honestly really liked reading this story. I know it's not easy to find the inspiration to write but nonetheless, I hope I'll see more of you in the Free! section of fanfics!

That last line tho xD
Anyway I really love your take on this and how you delivered the smut in such a sweet and gentle way. Also good job on the Haru's POV. I think you did a great job in expressing him and how he sees and compares his infatuation to Gou with water.

AWESOME!

Aww...That WAS a REALLY good HaruGou short! WAY TO GO! Hope to see more from you!