well despite the fact is skipped half your story there is some really good writing in it. your characterisation is really quite amazing, even if i disagree with how odin acts for a 1000 year old man. hell he acts like a noob playing the easy setting and bull rushing through it all and if he dies because he is rushing ahead without thought? meh at easy respawning is indefinite

your possessed collectors are insanely strong

you can skip chapters 8-9-10-11 and not miss anything.
grunt wakes up
shepard evaluates odin in her mind
odins celebrates a basterd halloween
they waste time at the citadel
odins goes to a shrink

there 4 chapter in 20 words. i swear this story gives me more of a history lesson on destiny then playing that game for years did

about half this story is reminising about the past whole damn history lessons on each weapon so much info that adds nothing to your plot.
i was expecting a guardian in mass effect but thats only true for half to story

I don't write Reviews often but for this I will and say good job on this. You really captured the destiny feel.

Love this story and the MC aswell as the beginning bits that feel like they are strait form the game and the parallels of humanity to the krogons

I ship ghost and edi 100%

this has got to be one of the best destiny fics out there. i like how you capture not only the tone of destiny, (those quotes at the beginning of the chapters feel like their literally from the game sometimes) but also how you show that yeah, Odin's from a much further advanced society and as such does things differently without ruining the mass effect side of things and making them seem stupid/weak.

you really give Odin an actual personality, and while hes powerful, hes not a Mary sue, like sure hes strong and has a crap ton of powers/weapons but hes 1000 years old, and he ACTS like it. one of the better OC's ive seen. his no nonsense attitude of just telling them hes from another universe and his lack of fucks to give are amazing.

i also really like how you did his relationship with grunt. its a very interesting way to carry out Odin's character arc, and the way the krogan parallel humanity is also amazing. this is defiantly a ten out of then- i only wish that it was longer and more complete. but BRAVO! you should be very proud of yourself. i could go on and on about how i love this and by extension you. but i think you get the idea.

Well, i would have liked him better if he was more domineering! He is old, experienced, i hope he will make some secret organization for the protection of the galaxy or something! He could be a cool leader! Knowledgeable, strong, mysterious...

Hope this story isn’t dead, I’m really enjoying it so far

That was wrong how you left me hanging after the end of that last chapter the guardian meeting a justicar and you just stop writing come on man you have to have something something going in the brain to make this story such a success in my mind it is hell at this point you can even do a pairing between either Miranda or Samara the Samara pairing will be because the Guardians are somewhat aligned with the justicars meaning the code of the justicars kind of colon signs with what the Guardians are about bass text both are warriors of light

I don't see how that Red vs Blue reference was physically possible lmao

Hm. Once Odin makes it to Omega Station, he becomes completely unlikeable. Odin comes off as an arrogant tool (How dare they attack a guardian! They don't know what guardians are. What is he, a spanish
inquisitor? ). And he sure had no problem just... killing that bartender. Or anyone. Who was trying to poison him for no particular reason besides giving a slight narrative excuse for his killing. He knows little about the cultural or historical context he finds himself in. He has no self control. He sounds like the sort of guardian who would threaten a human for bumping into him- not a shepherd, but a warlord.

If his character arc is about getting some humility, I'm in. If he's supposed to be likable, then I'm out.

I get it, power fantasies are fun to write and read. But to me, the story is uninteresting if the main character doesn't struggle.

This was an amazing story. I loved it from beginning to end. Hope to see you come back to it in the future.

just read this the first time and i have to say i'm liking it. it's a fresh take on the mass effect story and breathes new life into the already incredible story. i also like odin - he's a breath of fresh air in the grim story and having him as grunt's battlemaster was inspired. i hope to see more of this story sometime in the relatively near future, but i'm a sucker for a good story (understatement). no rush, but here's hoping a new chapter arrives soon.