OKAY BUT I ALMOST CRIED WHEN I REALISED THE SONG WAS GAIDHLIG! As a Gaidhlig speaker (albeit a patchy one since its leaving me) I basically sang along knowing the song!

Ok so... I wish I could say I loved this but I can't...
This fanfic had so much potencial but it did not go as well as it should have gone. The concept is pretty awesome, of a girl being a bride to the P4 And all that, but the thing is that she is a complete Mary sue. I really thought it would change at some point so I kept reading but I found myself disappointed. There was times I couldn't read from how cliche it was.
I think your OC is too perfect it gets annoying, and hypocritical too. And don't get me started at the "maybe" ship's, first with Lottie and Sebby then Edgar and Evelyn, and Evelyn and Violet, and Evelyn and Greenhill and Evelyn and Soma and every other guy who has a crush on Evelyn. I get that it is a boy's school and she the only girl but can't she be imperfect ever? And the Lottie "I love Bluer!" Scene was just painful to read, and Evelyn knowing that she should distrust the bad guys before they looked like bad guy's, you need to tone down a bit on the awesomeness in characters, a good character can have amazing characteristics but they also need to feel human. I was at a point waiting for Sebastian to say she was his daughter and that Ciel would get a crush on her, I mean she freaking knew Soma and he was crazy about her (as every other boy -_-')... I don't mean to be evil and be a hater is just I don't feel ok to just not say what went wrong... You have an amazing way of writing and I feel like you can do much better.
I really would like to see you make a rewrite of this fanfic where maybe Evelyn likes Bluer from the start, where Lottie is a better maid because has a friend she sucks, make Evelyn more flawed and that she doesn't know everyone and everything, I don't want to be harsh, it's just an opinion.

Saw it coming... -.-"

Can't wait too see more!

I really want Evelyn and Bluer to make it work. I seriously ship them! See you next update next update!

This story was interesting and I'm curious to see what happens next! I also hope things work out with Bluer and Evelyn find a way to work things out. I like them together!

yea liars and cheaters don't win tru in this fic and in real life

This was a amazing chapter! The intensity and the way you seamlessly wove Evylen into the flashbacks was perfect! I love how you got across the emotion and fear that filled the prefects when they saw what was taking place with Derrik and the way they reacted to what Derrik said both about he school at about Evylen.

Your portrayal of how they reacted by killing people really pulled me in, I was actually leaning forward on the edge of my seat as I read!

The chapter was perfect, building up the intensity to a peak and then leaving us on a cliffhanger that will have us glued to our emails waiting for the next update! I cannot wait to see where you take this, I'm absolutely loving the story!

Really, really awesome chapter, and I can't wait for your next update!

No! It was finished so quickly! You must upload a new chapter soooooooooonn!

On a more serious note, I get that you were going for a more intense feel for this chapter but I think that the shorter chapter might not have had the intended effect. The intensity was just starting to really build when the chapter ended which made it feel a tad choppy, making the intensity dissipate and thus cause the chapter to become slightly forgettable in wake of the really intense previous chapters. Not me trying to criticize, but I thought I'd just throw that out there for future chapters or stories so that you can achieve maximum impact for awesome stories like this:)

I like how you made Evelyn react to Derrick's grabbing her and almost biting her, it appeared very realistic and exact to the character you've been revealing to us. I also liked her backing up Ciel and how she switched into business mode, almost distancing herself from what was going on. Looking forward to your next update for sure!

Really enjoyed the chapter! I like the way you didn't automatically make Bluer and Evelyn perfect in their relationship with it just starting out. Looking forward to your next update for sure!

Awww! Blue is officially part of the Ravenne's family! My cutie
Yas! I can't wait to read about the tea party!

Awesome chapter! I'm looking forward to how you made it clear that Bluer would have to give is life up for Evelyn, it made their relationship more realistic.

Looking forward to your next chapter! The tea party scene (giggle snerk~) will be exciting to read about!

Amazing ! ;)

Amazing chapter, as usual. I quite enjoyed this chapter and it provided and sweet and amusing break before you delve into the bizarre dolls and the prefects killing the students. Really looking forward to your next update_

OMG can't wait for update