Hi, I just wanted to say that I spent the last couple days rereading this and it is still excellent. It may be unfinished but it is still a wonderfully written piece of work you should be proud of.

Love your story! Have you ever considered also posting on Archive of Our Own (AO3) too? I've noticed the community there is lovely and supportive (not that fanfiction dot net as a whole isn't), but I feel like AO3 folks would really enjoy your OC because she's so multifaceted and kick-ass. Anyway, no matter what, your writing is awesome, and best of luck with all your future writings!

I've only seen the Twilight movies and always pitied Charlie. Loved her interaction with him. They acted more like father & daughter than Bella ever did.

You know, I can actually see Bella saying those words. Well...without the slap.

Originally I clicked this story because I'd never read OC x Volturi kings before and the dark, depressing themes seemed interesting (I thought it was about Volturi and this oc instead of her backstory), but now I'm getting a bad feeling that I won't like Eva.

At first she seems to be exact opposite of Bella, less negative, loves the rain...but now I'm getting a impression that she's another Bella with a different color, so to speak.

Yes, she suffered from a abusive father and hates pity, understandable, but her attitude makes her appear prideful and whiny. And what is so odd about liking poetry, books, or playing video games?

Bella really comes across as self-centered, unapproachable and uninterested in anyone else besides Edward, doesn't she? Never found her very relatable.

I love this fic so much, I really hope that you come back to it. Did you get burned out, lose interest, or maybe writer's block? Perhaps life got in the way. I can't say too much about it, I have 3 stories on here that I started but haven't wrote in what 7 years lol, but my stories don't compare. This one is so amazing. You're truly have talent and I hope one day you'll come back to writing.

While I’m enjoying this it is VERY Mary Sue-ish. Eva makes sure to always talk about how she’s so different than the other girls - she likes to read and game! She would have been interesting without the whole I’m special look at me vibe imo

Please update this story, I absolutely love it. The way you write is great and the plot is amazing. Once I found this story I couldn't put it down. Thank you soooo much!

This was simply beautiful.
I know it was dark, but even in the darkness lies a simple beauty

Jane disapproved. You have no idea how much j lived that.

I'm so happy jasper had nothing to do with it. You got me worried there for a second not gonna lie.

I'm kinda sad for esme, but she also did nothing to stop it so I'm not sure how I feel.

I'm kinda curious what aro meant by saying he would see to it that forks would be supernatural free.

And poor Charlie.

Anyway this was another wonderful chapter. You are very talented.

Oehhh well Edward is definitely planning something. Can't wait to find out what happens next. I hope she will talk with her mates because even if she believes she's weak they won't shame her for it. It is okay to feel things and I doubt it will alter their view of her.

Jasper is the only good one.

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And maybe Esme

I loved itttttt!
I love that they are patient with her. I can't wait to see her grow. To see her make process even if that road will be a long one.
You capture her so perfectly which makes me wonder. You okay?
You don't have to answer if that makes you uncomfortable.
Anyways I love your writing.

This is the third or fourth time reading this and I love it

I recently found this story and I absolutely LOVE it. Don't ever let anyone put you down about something you care about sweetheart. You have so much potential as a writer and I look forward to discovering more of your work.

Awww poor Aro, Marcus and Caius, but I think it is nice she gets to spend some more time with Charlie. Charlie is the best. You did an incredible job with writing this. I simply love your story so far. Can't wait to read more.