Pretty good, Flame!
I honestly wasn't expecting you to use Red in the way you did, but I think it ended up being interesting.
You totally got the quote right. I could feel it in the entire one-shot.
That ending was pretty sad. I hope Gold finds happiness of some sort with her new Twoleg owner(s).
Poor Marmalade...

:O Wow. That was amazing. Is Frost going to die like that in the forum?

Well done, Flamey! You are quite the descriptive writer, I have to say. :) I hardly can find any fault with your work, great job! Hope you write more soon!
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Oooo interesting Flamey! Does that mean we need to create the characters Darkfang, Aspenpaw, Ryepaw, etc.?