Excellent writing! You truly are a master story-teller! I have to say I am a bit disappointed that Gerudo Ways/Betrayal seems to have been discontinued... (That's originally what I was searching for before I came across Forgotton Queen) Anyhoo, so far this looks like you have a great story plot going for it. I look forward to reading the rest of the chapters! (and any future ones.)

Excellent writing! You truly are a master story-teller! I have to say I am a bit disappointed that Gerudo Ways/Betrayal seems to have been discontinued... (That's originally what I was searching for before I came across Forgotton Queen) Anyhoo, so far this looks like you have a great story plot going for it. I look forward to reading the rest of the chapters (and any future ones)!

Another well-written chapter. I feel quite sad for poor Link and Colin, and I am interested to learn more about the relationship between Ghirahim and Denda. That last line of his especially makes me curious….

Very well written. I like Ghirahim's personality - even if he is a touch OoC. It was rather captivating and I hope you have the next chapter up soon.

Wow...For the first time in a while, I don't know how I feel about a fan fiction. I mean, this is ridiculously good but also so dark. It is..wow. Ghirahim is sadistic but in a more dark kind of manor which really adds to it. I feel sorry for Link, and the poor kids who were set 'free'. I will definitely keep an eye on this.

This is a very good chapter. I feel so bad for the boys that the Gereudo took. I also feel slightly bad for Ghirahim as well. May not been your intention, but I do. Keep up the good work.

Another interesting chapter. I feel sorry for those two. That would truly be a terrifying ordeal. I look forward to what happens next.

This was very well-written, and I especially loved your description of the Gerudo at the beginning. You really managed to convey the fear Colin was feeling. That would be quite terrifying, and I admit that I felt a bit nervous just reading this. Nice job.

Wow! The way you described Ghirahim was perfect. I love how gentle he can seem, but you can tell that something dangerous lies underneath. Poor Link and Colin; I can't wait to see if they escape or what happens to them.

This is a great start. You are descriptive and it really paints a picture in your head.