Reviews for Undone |
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![]() ![]() ![]() "Draco... we're married." That made my flipping day. |
![]() ![]() ![]() AMAZING JOB I LOVE IT! |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOVE IT! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I would have liked to catch them. |
![]() ![]() Hahaha, oh my god XD The way harry "You want me to leave"... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, that was very hot. I don't usually read porn unless it's part of a much larger story, so this was kind of new ground for me, but I enjoyed it. I did notice some spelling and grammar issues, there were comma's needed in places and periods or nothing were commas should be. However, this was still a very good piece of smut, which just needs some polishing up. :) I did like how when Ron came in, Draco got even more turned on. That /would/ do it. All in all, I think you are a good writer with the potential to get a lot better. Don't be discouraged when you don't feel like a good writer, we've all been there, we all get better. It's just part of the process. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() this made my life |
![]() ![]() ![]() Umm, so I have no clue if I like your fic or not. It looks like there was a glitch when it posted because the coding for each line is showing. It makes it very difficult to read. |