Aw cute story!

It is a sweet little scene, but I would not call it more than that. Personally, I would have appreciated a little more back-story or more details to fill in some unanswered questions, like how Hermione was in contact with James, were Remus and Hermione supposed to be the same age, were they both still attending Hogwarts, if so how the hell did that happen... things like that. Once I got over all the confusion and tried to fill in some blanks, I thought you did a great job on this blurb in so few words. :0)

Very tender moment. Enjoyed this a lot!

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great little fic! you should totally continue this like have a sequel or something . I like the set up of it

AAAAAAAWWWW! that was adorable. great work.

Slightly confused, but this was sweet. Wish it wasn't a one shot.

Awhh, i loved this hunny! Please ignore that rude review. I think this was fabulous and really enjoyed reading it :) xx

Loved it, a very sweet and Perfect story:-))

It was not the best I have read. On a scale of one to ten, yours is probably about a four and a half. Here are some reasons and examples why.
(Coming to the end of the road, she found nothing almost thinking it was the wrong road. Hermione knew she had double-checked the name a few times before coming down the road)
You said road three times in that small part of your fanfiction. That just really irritated me to no end. EXPAND YOUR VOCABULARY!
(Even thought her visit here was a surprise she hoped he would be angry with her for showing up.)
Why would Hermione want Remus to be angry with her? You missed a few words there.
(Hermione grabbed him quickly letting him rest on her. "Right now helping up back to where ever you just were.") That was a sloppy sentence. It should be," Right now, helping you back to wherever you were." It was a little hard to read at first.
("Remus do you have any potions i can give you?"Hermione asked) We learned this when we were all seven. Capitalize single I's.
("And you haven't gotten them, why?"Hermione questioned.
"Don't have enough energy to move right now." Remus responded.)
Okay, so Remus got off his butt to open the door but he couldn't get potions which would ease the pain, because he was too tired. You need a little help with that.
("Smartass." Hermione grumbled) This doesn't really bother me, but I know occ characters tend to really annoy people. Hermione doesn't cuss. Just a warning.
("Milly." Hermione called seconds later a small house elf appeared.
"Yes, Missy Mione?" the small elf squeaked.
"I hate to bother you but could you help me," Milly nodded quickly. "Thank you. My friend here is really sick and could use some hot soup, mostly broth."
"Yes, of course." The elf quickly popped away leaving Hermione with Remus)
Whatever happend to Hermione hating slavery? She wouldn't just give up without an explanation.
("Why haven't you told me yet?" Hermione asked noticing him stiffen slightly before he spoke.
"Told you what?"
"That you're a werewolf."
Remus turned looking at her in shock. "How do you know that?"
"I have known since last year, Remus. I am not stupid.")
Seriously, she waited a year before talking about it.
MYTHOUGHTS
You should work on your dialogue. You have a lot of potential to become a great Harry Potter fanfiction writer. Carry on with your dreams and live life to the fullest. I never intended to hurt your feelings with anything that was said, I really want to help you become a better writer.
Violetstormwinter

How sweet