Reviews for Across the Universe Book 1: Pieces of Destiny |
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Guest chapter 4 . 5/8 I know this is old, but the English alphabet was considered high galactic standard.:) wiki/High_Galactic_alphabet |
snowcloud8 chapter 8 . 2/6 I like the story so far. Some of the things you have in your story are a bit cliched and unoriginal, and the singing along with songs is kinda of unnecessary and aren't really a great way of explaining who your character is, but I like that you paid attention to the fact that they probably wouldn't understand English (though I have yet to see that issue explained yet) and I do enjoy that you give Anakin and your protagonist some organic interactions rather than having them fall in love with each other. Also fair warning: Padme has taken a massive backseat in all of this to the point where I don't think she's spoken in the last two chapters, so be aware of that. It's OK if you didn't. It's hard to write multiple people in a scene. Future writing tip is to highlight certain characters different colors and then go over the list and see if one of your characters hasn't talked in awhile. |
Arkytior's Song chapter 18 . 2/6/2019 First off I'm screaming at the Phantom of the Opera chapter I freaking LOVED IT! One of my absolute favorite movies and soundtracks ever and I just ugh. Again I ended up crying but this time while surprised why, not surprised it happened lmao. BUT OMG THE ENDING LIKE WHAT?! AAAAAA cant wait to start the next one! |
Guest chapter 8 . 1/19/2019 Wait where did padme go? Did i forget? |
Natman717 chapter 19 . 1/10/2019 Amazing! Thanks for this story. |
Bipolar chapter 4 . 11/25/2018 Am I the only one that finds it fucking weird that in one chapter she's talking about helping them change their fate and NOT letting them watch the movies? Like, are you a fucking idiot, girl? |
Guest chapter 18 . 4/24/2018 "you can't fix stupid" lmaoooo anyway, this was pretty enjoyable! I like Aria as a character, even though she ticks off a lot of "Mary-Sue"-esque tropes. :) |
Isabel3710 chapter 11 . 4/15/2018 How dare you! *pulled out lightsaber* |
EdwardBellaRenesmeCullen chapter 18 . 3/16/2018 Summary is interested but I don’t want wasted time to read this story. I am obidala fan and I only read story they end up together. I don’t like author who make them or their friend end up with obi wan. |
DullReign82 chapter 6 . 2/15/2018 this is such a good story and I will continue to read more. |
DullReign82 chapter 1 . 2/15/2018 Anakin it's no wonder you turned to the dark side. lol A solid beginning. |
Guest chapter 14 . 1/16/2017 Aria is about as likeable as Jar-Jar Binks |
Christineoftheopera chapter 15 . 1/6/2017 The 2004 movie version... oh dear. That was based off the better stage production the one which would have been performed on stage. |
Guest chapter 16 . 12/19/2016 Tears. So many |
micky-likes-stuff chapter 8 . 12/3/2016 Wow.! awesome. I totally love the story question though do you intend to make Captain Alaric be like Captian Rex? cause imagining it does seems so... hehehehe |