Myzer; Walker of Roads is he a final fantasy character?

Awesome Xion makes a comeback also I loved the great mouse detective

Awesome job I can see this being a real video game.

Wait a second, when yu say new game plus do you mean you'll rewrite this story with a new game? God I hope not.
But now to be serious, you have really good ideas. Maybe you should get together with someone who knows their stuff and make a game/hack based on this story using KH games as a base (cut scenes would be simple dialogue boxes, and one could use Chain of memories as a base to simplefy things using a black haired version of the Kairi sprite for Xion).

Well call me interested

To be honest, I think this is even more cruel to Roxas than the Original was. It will still end with his destruction, and it will be after he goes on a great adventre to save the one. Finding out it was fake after something like that could really hurt. Depending on what you do with Kairi and Xion, it can become even more cruel. If Data-Kairi does end up whith the real one's memories than all of Roxas work would have been for, well not nothing, but it would be very painful. Finally, if his interaction whith Xion end negatively, he could end up beating himself over it if he gets his memoties back.

Hmm this looks very interesting. I can't wait to read more and I hope you keep it as roxiri. Hmm I wonder if that's the real Xion there. Also, there's just one small mistake. In one sentence you wrote Ventus instead of roxas. Other than that, great job! Update soon!