Great story. I was so engrossed by it that I kept forgetting to review!

I really enjoyed reading this, although I would like to see them be able to be slightly more open about their relationship. Curious to see how his parents would react. I would also LOVE a link to the prompt on the kink meme if possible. Thanks for sharing your story! I'm off to read the sequel!

This was a really good story. A little heavy on the smut for my tastes but it's skimmable without anything lost. The fluff was what I was looking for after my last story which ended on a real sad note. On to part two.

I read this at night for over a week and I fell in love with this story. All I can say is amazing writing, a few errors here and there but the overall storytelling makes up for it.

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I must say, you have an interesting premise involving a different meeting for Garrus and Shepard, especially before the events of the first game!

What a fantastic story, I cant wait to read the next part :D

...they never spoke of what they actually did as soldiers. Oh, now THAT is a stinger, right in the middle of another gorgeous, quiet moment. This chapter definitely feels like a turning point in their relationship, what with all the physical touches and Garrus finally, truly telling her she needs to get help. You've brought them to a place where Garrus can say that, and Jane will listen.

Also, I have SUCH a weakness for gloved vs. ungloved hands and what all that contact means, so I read this with a HUGE smile on my face. I can't wait to see where you take them next! 3

they on each other in a flurry of wet tongues - Are.

her sensitive bud and rewards her - He.

aware enough to not want to have such an expensive article of clothing by them stepping all over it. - Ruined? Destroyed?

wardrobe and is able to turn back to him to continue where they left off before she feels a snap at her ass. - About instead of able?

"What happened to removing it like a normal person?" - Ouch, Jane! :D

made out of real materials that won't rip after in the first wash - After or in.

Wanting to later test her idea - I don't really get how this leads into what's happening. What do you mean by "later"?

biting down again to deeper the tracks of her teeth - Deepen.

pulling over again with a scream. - It at least needs "her" in there, but I'd add "the edge" as well.

Her cunt is constantly twitching at mere - The.

Her voice is joined by her husband's drug out moaning growl as he spends himself within her - This should have commas separating the adjectives.

Mmmmm, I'm pretty sure I missed a few things I coulda commented on for concrit in the mad dash to take it all in. :D Fantastic chapter, I love the added thing with the colored salve. Like Jane, I think I'd be more squeamish about being the one to bite instead of being bitten. I think it's fantastic that Jane was not only willing to try things the turian way, but turns out it completely rocked her world :D Nice hinting at the Normandy there at the end, btw. I look forward to seeing what comes next!

General reminder to watch for conjunctions that need commas, actions that aren't dialogue tags that don't need commas, and moving the actions of one character apart from the dialogue of another.

what?Jane - No space.

Jane shrugs. "I'm a soldier so I have really defined legs and arms. I don't really want to gross out my fiancé with me trying to look nice in a dress with that showing." - As if it would gross Garrus out :(

The silently motion - They.

enough to put to at ease - You.

"I think that this helps to cover your scars and helping you be more at ease with very goddess-like details. What do you think?" - I would remove the "and" and replace it with a comma, otherwise "helping" sounds off. Since you already have "help" previously in the sentence, keeping "helping" is more appealing than changing it to "help". You could also change one of them to aid/aiding or something else.

drawing her attention the Asari Matriarch. - To.

She really hopes she doesn't show up late to her own wedding because she was too picky to pick out a dress in time. - It's best to avoid double or more instances of the same word too close together. This "picky" and "pick" especially stand out.

He pulls by with a lighthearted chuckle. - ? Do you mean he pulls back?

"Now, how are the lucky bride and groom?" - Who.

"You two seem sound like very to-the-point people." - Needs rewording ;)

"You sound more like a stuffy Salarian couple than a blushing human bride and her knight in living armor." - Bahahaha. Knight in living armor. I love it!

give them that opportunity to becoming as one - "opportunity to becoming" doesn't work well.

*SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE*
*Ahem*
Sorry, OK, so THAT happened! All the warm fuzzy feelings! I loved their vows, they made me tear up a little. Fantastic chapter, I love the detail you put into all of it. It's fantastic that they had rings they could get at the chapel, and it's lovely that Garrus even has one. I so look forward to reading the next chapter! Annnndddd ... I'm so glad I don't have to wait for it to be released :P

Oh, this is a much different take on the Earthborn background! It's so quiet but hopeful - a reminder, perhaps, that Earth isn't a complete loss now that humanity's reached the stars? There's still love and hope, even when they come wrapped in the guise of a grumpy old guy from an apartment in your building.

Jane's got such a storied past - and I mean that in a quite literal way. You've fleshed her out more through what she's confided to Garrus than a lot of fics do (though I would beware of info-dumps, and suggest trying to make other reveals or stories more conversational), and it's heartbreaking to know that small joy was taken from her when she was so young.

A wonderful, quiet, thoughtful chapter. :)

There's a scene in The Stand where Larry Underwood thinks "You can't help liking someone who plays the guitar" - true or not, it's certainly true in this scene. It makes sense that Jane would need...not a crutch, but an instrument (heh) to help her connect to the world outside Garrus' apartment. Not only is she connecting, though, she's reaching out to families, to people of other races - there's an entire galaxy out there, and she's exploring it. Tentatively, but it means she's alive again.

Please tell me you're not going to totally destroy her again! :P

That's the sad truth about recovering, Jane: you pull down the walls that kept you from connecting with anyone, and you have to let the wounds heal all over again. She's coming alive again, and that means relapsing, for lack of a better word. But it says a lot that she feels comfortable enough to let those walls down with him - with Garrus, the supremely patient and supportive turian she met by chance - so even if things hurt, she's moving into a healthier place. There's just a lot of guilt and pain to relive as her wounds are exposed to the fresh air again. :/ I pity her, but like Garrus, I know she'll pull through.

This whole chapter is just so sweet - how much her approval means to him, how simple and uncomplicated his offer of friendship (and home!) is - and you just keep reinforcing that they're exactly what the other needs. No romance (and believe me, I LOVE the slow burn you're accomplishing, because you're doing so well with them as friends!) yet, but they're connecting so intimately without it that I don't miss it at all.

And HA! Garrus' mother laying him down on a bed of ground Pourka. Makes me wonder what Jane will put their theoretical babies on - baked ziti? Hash browns? I'm just to beat this joke into the ground, heh.

Lovely work, as always!

Whenever they wanted to go out they tended to make sure they could plan ahead to give them enough opportunity to make sure no one they knew could catch them together. - This crushes my soul a little. That they have to hide their relationship. That the universe is so lacking in understanding. That the people they care about might be. :( They're too lovely together to hide it.

That shuts her off from any more complaints.- this is a little off sounding. That silences any further complaints ... or something, maybe?

shifts to kneel between her flushes thighs.- I'm having trouble keeping up with their positioning. I'm lost as to where they were before if a shift leads to his kneeling between her thighs. This is an ongoing problem through the scene. One second, she's looking up at his dark silhouette, and the next his face is pressed against hers. We sorta need the transitions.

instead motioning to relax and let him lead - earlier it was too dark for her to see his expression. Did I miss them turning on lights?

his plates against her clit - something I've wondered about before ... how are his open plates rubbing against her? She's described him as having a lot of girth, so those plates would be spread apart. Just something I wondered about.

I loved the whole no translator thing. That she wants to experience his voice and his language without the filters. It shows a great deal about how much understanding she wants between them. And I love that it doesn't change his voice. The whole idea of translators is odd and opens a snake's nest of questions. :D But it's a lovely idea.

And yay for morning sex. Hot and sweet. A lovely smut chapter. :D