Ugh I love this so much. Everytime I read it it just hits me. You capture it all so well.

I really thought the take on the scene in the abandoned warehouse was out of place, there was no way Lewis wouldnt of raped Olivia, he was waiting too long for this moment and then he simply says ok.
No that was really wrong, you however understand me and made an awesome story of it.
Kudos my friend

OH PUKE! u r a great writter and i LOVE this story and its what we all believe happened at both locations... BRAVO!

Congratulations for your good work , I liked , although the passages or Liv was tortured and raped are difficult to read .
Like many fans , about this famous scene in the bathroom, I was frustrated at not having seen anything . You described very well the feelings of shame , disgust and humiliation through which Olivia.
I confess that episodes with Lewis are my favorites even though she is tortured, but I'm sure many fans would have desired it to be raped as in " surrender Benson" in "beat 's obsession ." Indeed Lewis being a serial rapist , sadistic, he would have been logical to pass the act . But the writers did not want to cross the line ... and you , you did , congratulations ! Sorry for english mistakes , I'm french !

I love this so far! It is so detailed which makes it easy to imagine/picture everything that's going on. It helps that I know the characters already too. I can't wait to read more here soon!

Whoa! I never noticed you had actually written a fanfic! Good for you! Is this really your first story? Because it doesn't sound like it at all; it reads very smoothly and cohesively. For a first story, you chose a really dark and challenging subject matter that is so hard to do well without gratuitously exploiting the violence aspect. I just read most of this in one sitting (I say most of it because I skimmed over some parts) and it was intense. The story is so well-written and it's scary how you good you are at getting into Lewis' mind. You get his voice across on paper as genuinely scary, rather than turning him into a cartoonish trope. The detail and the length of time we spend with Lewis here does nothing to diminish his horrifying effect. I also like how you had Olivia trying to make sense of it all as she's fighting to survive, trying to -almost scientifically- observe and piece together his behaviour so she doesn't lose it. She comes up with these implicit theories about him, about his personality, why he does what he does and tries to use that in order to survive. And sometimes that may not work, but it's intriguing nonetheless and you did a great job of getting into both their minds.

I’m literally the worst because I’ve been trying to get myself to this for days, but my own struggle with fanfic has kinda kept me out of the headspace to read and review anything. But I never forgot and finally here I am. And wow, what an end to your story that was. In my opinion, your best chapter. Just so well thought out and written. The descriptions were fantastically done…and heart breaking in their vividness. I think that is something that you do particularly well…create haunting imagery. And that’s a good thing. I mean it was present right from the start with the idea of Amelia seeing the start of all of this and Olivia having to tell her to look away.

I love how you took on the bathroom explanation with this story, but you didn’t stop there and you kept going with this chapter, explaining missing time for Beast’s Obsession. And, of course, offering up this addition of events to the granary. As I said, well thought out and it flowed seamlessly. Also, your Lewis in this is important. There’s a intangible something to Lewis and his voice here that you capture so well. And so everything he says and does is just so him, so like the monster we saw onscreen and it’s easy to be drawn in to the story. Not that I’m surprised that you get him right, but still… I did notice the shout out you talked about. lol Noticed that as soon as I read it and thought it was very cool. Finally, I have a habit of noting beautiful lines if they exist in a story and they do in yours. And there are a couple I could’ve chosen from, but this one was my favorite: I cannot take this constant soundtrack to the annihilation of my soul. Amazing. So great job. Congrats on finishing your first story. And thanks for the heart break.

I realized that I told you about the Easter eggs I found, but I never actually gave it a proper review D: this was a perfect end to this little series, and your Lewis voice is creepy as all hell- I could hear it so clearly in my mind. And then...ugh. even while it was breaking my soul, you did such a good job of narrating the assault while it was happening. It was enough to get the emotions across without just being overly vulgar. Sometimes subtle is best. But anyway, I admired that because I love reading something and thinking wow, there's no way I could've pulled that off! I know you said you're done for a while, but I sure hope you come back with something else before too long :D

Wow that was great

Wow! Flabbergasted...loved it all, please tell me you'll be writing another lewis fic bc it was so damn good.

Perfect. It feel like this is what happened on the break... Thanks

Wow Colleen! Youre my favorite writer!
This was... Ugly! And yet very well written... Both characters were very in character! And the part with them sitting on the bench looking at the sunrise. I can clearly see him forcing Olivia to endure such a "romantic" moment, because she had to in order to save Amelia.
I wonder, what did you mean you focused more on AU? What is AU? I'm still not fluent in this f.f/Twitter language I guess.
Anyhow! Very well written! I WISH we got more insight in the 4 days she endured, wish we found out what happened in the bathroom (Kevin said we would if svu were renewed.. Just saying) Wish we found out what happened during the hours from the granary to were Amelia was hidden. So many questions. I know some on twitter complain about us who would like to know, telling us to let it go and saying we need to get over ourselves and get a life.. Lol... I don't care.. I'll always be curious! And I'll always wish we gotten more info about her days with Lewis and the journey afterwards! Hope they don't let this story go and that they'll get back to it eventually! Thank you for the update!

This story is without a shadow of a doubt one of the BEST fan fiction stories I have ever read, and that's all across the board, not just for SVU.

It was the ideal psychological thriller from start to finish and could've only been written by someone who truly understands and appreciates the psyche of the main villain.
I personally recognize and appreciate the fact that you are clearly an enthusiastic reader. As an avid reader myself one of my biggest turn-offs in fan fiction stories is when the author is really just trying to get all of their ideas out at once and don't really have a knack for storytelling.

Also the format of the story is just perfection. Some of the things that can kill a potentially good fan fiction (and general pet peeves of mine) are when the author uses bad grammar, has a limited vocabulary, neglects to provide vivid descriptions of the setting to "set the scene" for the reader, and finally is in such a hurry to get to the "meat" of the story that they end up rushing and don't allow the reader any time to actually analyze and soak-in what it is they're reading.

I also appreciate that the writing style used here is very mature and forces the reader to think; the speech and actions of the characters aren't handed to us on a silver platter and the author almost makes you work for it. Something else I also noticed and appreciate is that while most of the readers are obviously fans of SVU who are familiar with the characters and the storyline, this story is written in a unique way in that it's almost not even necessary for the reader to already be familiar with the 'Save Benson Saga'.
The reader is immediately thrown into it and it grabs their attention because you paint the picture and set the mood so thoroughly; we can see what the characters see, smell what they smell, hear what they hear, feel what they feel and hear what they're thinking so almost nothing is left up to the imagination (which in this case is a good thing). You took liberties with the original storyline, but amazingly managed to stay true to it as well the characters; if the network had been allowed to (and had wanted to do so), this story absolutely sounds plausible as something that could've occurred on the actual show. I was also shocked and impressed with your ability to manipulate and turn phrases almost with no effort at all.

This is truly an amazing piece of work that could've only been written by a true fan.

oh no! Poor Livia!

As I knew you would, you completed your story with a job well done. I can honestly say I was completely clueless as to what this chapter was going to hold, but I REALLY didn't expect all of that. Holy mother. There was so much evil, but also so much insight and things I liked. The line that really stuck with me was the one about "the soundtrack to the annihilation of my soul." That was good stuff. Just everything about Olivia's sacrificial nature was so spot on, how her first priority was continuously Amelia. How, even in the midst of this assault, she kept her focus on the girl and how to keep her safe. Lewis's taunting was horrific, but it also offered a lot of insight into the trial and such. You always do a great job with weaving in small details and explanations as you go, and they don't go unnoticed. Certainly not by me, lol. Hashtag Lewis Whisperers. Anyway, I'm proud of you for completing your first story. I know how stressful it was haha. But now you've captured the fandom's attention with your talents, so we shall be expecting more soon ;)