How is kai a d*ksick? I mean he seems spiteful bigoted sarcastic petty and managing but he seems to be a loyal bastardized at the very least. can t see him as so bad if youbactually were smart and were respectful.

We finally get to see the absolute clusterfuck of destruction that was Dalthos, i can't wait.

And i'm really starting to like Saracino.

Yes, yes yes!
Cannot wait to see Dalthos asswhooping in all it's glory.

Yay. More Ahern. My favorite old bastard. And more kicking dumb turians asses. My favorite. Keep up the amazing work.

Nice job on this. I need to go back to ch14 to see how you bridged to these events. Very Ahern as you had him in earlier chapters. Thanks loads for your hard work on this, looking forward to future installments of it and of course of the main story.

¡Debiste actualizar la historia principal! bueno ya que pero debo preguntar ¿de donde sacas tiempo de responder las criticas y no lo usas en cambio para actualizar? debio ser la historia krogan o drell hace mucho tiempo que las llevamos esperando o un informer STG eso si seria bueno, bueno adios.

also, given his exploits, how was Kyle not a General by the time Mindoir happened? i get Ahern turning down any promotions past Commodore, but why would Kyle? especially whe Florez was one? Kyle's a far better soldier and tactician.

any chance of you updating this or the main story anytime soon?

"Ahern watched it with narrowed eyes as Florez came up" quot from chapter 12, which apparently i alread reviewed in a previous readthrough, were you implying that Ahern thinks that was a setup, that Shepard was an EAGL sympathizer? with his saving of Kahlee a last ditch effort to save his own ass after seeing the way the wind was blowing, to try and divert suspicion away from him?

except for the part where you reveal EAGL was right, that Ardiente WAS Manswell's puppet, and Manswell DID orchestrate everything...

...you have Shepard's father saving both Saracino and Sanders in this, at great risk to himself. how does this man becaome the bastard that he is later on?

also leads into interesting questions about Flores's role in helping track down and kill Shepard's parents.

and again you're bringing to mind Judge Dredd with the mention of ABC Robots, heh.

"this sounds like a goddamned video game script." If only video game scripts were as good as you write.

Thank you Dante claus

Very good, really excited for the upcoming mission!

Sorry the original fiction isn't going well, but at least we're going to see more osabc, "best story ever written"

"sounds like a goddammed video game script"

Me: (snorts)