Reviews for The Guile and Devotion of a Black Heir
andreamed17 chapter 1 . 7/21
Hello good night, I love the story and its plot, and there are very few about this couple, I love all your stories and knowing that you have abandoned this story saddens me a little. I do not know the reason for this and I hope it is nothing serious and that you are well Thanks for all your stories.
Guest chapter 12 . 7/17
It turns out that Neville was innocent and now his future consort is showing he’s not up for compromising about elf or anything really. I wish it was just Barty jr and bellatrix that attacked the longbottoms. Maybe even have it that the brothers hide Neville in the closet of something do they didn’t attack him to. That way Neville could come around. When I thought Neville had betrayed Harry I was okay with it and than it seems like ras was copying his brother maybe instead of being himself but how he acted about just being nicer to elf’s shows that this won’t be good for Harry I’m kind of turned off from the story
Guest chapter 23 . 7/13
What about a Radamanthus themed cake? White, there could even be flowers but then have the bakery that did Harry’s heart make some more organs and intestines, and Radamanthus’ head to go on top. Some raspberry coolis would show up nicely against the white as well...
Sorry, I completely forgot Harry actually HAD started tutoring his friends.
Also, Harry still hasn’t learnt Occlumancy. Given that he’s lying to Dumbledore, making some attempt at that might be a good idea, even if he can only master the basics.
Guest chapter 29 . 7/11
Love this story, great character development between harry and his fiancee, would love to see where you take this next. Would love to see more of draco/astoria progression, and how's Theo getting on with Daphne, does Daphne know her contract been terminated, and I would love to see pansy end up with ron
Guest chapter 11 . 7/8
Hey, I’m just rereading this, and I really love the way you’ve captured the cultural norms of a society where arranged marriage is the norm. It’s a far more realistic look at Pureblood society then most people manage to capture, and I love the way you’re depicting the fact that the Purebloods just have a culture of there own that is different from muggle Britain without obsessing over this difference, very refreshing. The one thing I will say though is that I feel like the Harry in the books was a lot more preoccupied with his friend’s safety. Obviously he’s been sick and is no longer talking to those friends, but I still feel like, now that he’s well and really has thrown his lot it with the Purebloods, that he’d likely be trying to do more to protect them, even if it was just starting the DA back up so he could teach the Slytherins how to duel. The Harry in the books is actually a fairly violent person, which given his life experience is completely expected, but I feel like he’s buried a lot of aspects of his personality for the sack of fitting in with the Malfoys. Surely now that he feels more comfortable, there will be things other then house elf rights that will start coming out?
Also, I totally forgot the Charlie may be a Death Eater! Please update, I really want to see where that goes!
If you are suffering from writers block, it might also be really relevant, now that you’ve introduced Pureblood culture as the norm, to explore the perceptions of Muggleborns as they enter the magical world, and how Harry might start some programs to teach them that they’re not just going to a new school, they’re entering a new country and culture and, while they don’t necessarily have to conform to the culturel norms of that country if they don’t want to, they do have to be mindful and respectful.
You could also talk a bit about what ‘dark magic’ actually IS, as that’s something you’ve mostly avoided so far, and perhaps you could also clarify exactly what Lord Voldemort’s political agenda is, as from memory I don’t think that’s been clarified yet either, although it’s been a while since I last read your work.
Hope you update soon, it’s a really interesting and unique story and I look forward to reading about Harry’s seventh year.

PS As both green and blue eyes are a recessive traits, Rabastan must have two blue alleles for him to have blue eyes (bb). For Harry to have green eyes, he must either have two green alleles (GG) or one green and one blue (Gb) as green is more dominant then blue. Neither of then can have a brown allele as brown is more dominant then either blue or green; if they had a brown allele, they’d have brown eyes, which means none of their children can possibly have brown eyes. If Harry is (GG) then all of their children will have green eyes, as Rabastan can only possibly provide a blue allele because he only has blue alleles, meaning that all their children will be Gb and thus with show Harry’s green trait as the more dominant one. However if Harry is Gb then Rabastan can still only provide a blue allele, but approximately 50% of their children will inherit Harry’s green allele and 50% will inherit his blue allele, meaning half their children will have blue eyes (bb) and half will have green eyes (Gb). Any child Harry has with brown eyes cannot possibly be Rabastan’s.
Skin tone is a co-dominant gene, meaning their children should be about halfway between their skin-tones. Hair colour is a bit more complicated because there are more possibilities given then Harry and Rabastan both have dark hair, which is the most dominant meaning they could have recessive traits for pretty much anything really.
Suffice to say that if the last few generations of Rabastan’s family haven’t had red hair, it’s pretty unlikely their kids will as it’s a recessive trait as well, so they’d have to be getting it from both sides.
Please update soon!
Mushishixxxholic chapter 29 . 7/8
Love it waiting for updates
ixSorA chapter 18 . 7/1
you know I actually like bill very much and seeing him in this story kinda felt wrong for me...his not that close to the Weasley and fumbles since he move out.. but it is what it is still this story is very very good
Guest chapter 3 . 6/30
Hey, I’m just been rereading this story, and I’m wondering why Harry still hasn’t tried to teach Draco how to duel better, or gotten any of his family to become Animagi so they’ll be better prepared if they’re arrested and sent to Azcaban. Surely his protective instincts would be pushing him to try and look after the people he loves? (Sorry about the spelling)
Tea chapter 29 . 6/29
Love this! Plz update again soon!
loleo chapter 29 . 6/28
Can‘t wait to read more
Randomly Talented chapter 29 . 6/16
I love how this story is progressing, once I found it I just couldn't stop reading. I hope that the runes on Harry's neck can be erased and leave no scarring. Since I'm sure it would bring up horrible memories for Harry in the future. I also hope Amelia Bones isn't killed off, she is such a great person (in the fact that she will be as unbiased as possible with everything). I just can't wait when Dumbledore realizes that he's on the losing side of the war and finally loses. With his "for the greater good" bullshit shoved right back at him. Oh the irony.

Till the next update/chapter.
Maryn chapter 29 . 6/6
Is so cool that fic i love rabastan and harry and i hate dumbledore please i need a new chapther
I hope you are ok and youre family too
Pleasee continue this fic
Love Faith Embers chapter 29 . 5/21
Great chapter! Can’t wait for more...
TheGemNara chapter 29 . 5/16
Your writing is so incredible and your dedication and drive to do it clearly shows. I can’t wait to read your first original novel if you do plan on writing one. I have no doubt it will be absolutely divine
abracadabrasaur chapter 12 . 5/16
This is hilarious. I’ve never read a better story where Harry goes dark. You do it so subtly. It seems natural now that Harry is just like casually planning to murder people.
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