Love the story, but it is rather hard to read.

Your paragraphs flow like this:
C1,
"C1", C2,
"C2", C2, "C2", C1,
"C1", C2,
(C Character)

What is Should be like is this:
C1,"C1",C1
"C2",C2
"C1",C1
C2,"C2"

You need to keep both Identifier and "Speaker" within the same paragraph. You split them and meld a different identifier into the wrong paragraph every single time. The identifying character should Always be directly connected to the "speaker"(within the same paragraph). Having two separate characters within a paragraph, neither actually linked together, just makes this rather odd to read. You can put the "spoken" portion either before or after the identifier. It doesn't help that you are literally breaking a sentence between two separate paragraphs. A comma does NOT end a sentence or paragraph.

As it stands, the only reason I don't get lost is because of the uniformity or your writing.

Other than this single formatting issue, your story is amazing.

Wow... Gotta love crazy gray faction... Either kill fast and then hit the pub or go out with an all-mighty banging blaze.

Oh you cheeky little dickwaffle, ending it like that!

Alright. Following that plea at Ch 8, here goes.
I like what you write.
I have no faith in my critic review skills. They suck.
Have a nice day.

Good but the random just drop is annoying as hell.

Think you're getting a bit out of hand with muggle weapons and what not.

Did Hermione claim ravenclaw? Since they went to gringots but didn't do anything except the business stuff for lily.

Also I keep forgetting to ask. Who's taller Lily or hermione cause I thought early on you said Hermione was taller now you're saying Lily is taller

I'm reading the original before I read the rewrite. But so far it's a good story. I feel like the Granger's were a bit rushed. I think as founders you should keep Lilly and Hermione in their gowns and crowns :P. I love Bella and how Cissa shows up soon and is just as fun. Also I hope Susan takes Hufflepuff soon! Is Neville going to be griffindor? I'm assuming hers using the sword. Do the ladies get nice daggers? I know Lilly already has Slytherins dagger

This is stupid. Even the first chapter was truly appalling.

OK, I'll bite.
Thoroughly enjoying the tale.
SpeedisArmour

Seeing as I have previously reviewed some of these chapters and I can't remember it because I was shit-faced (not on alcohol or drugs, but apparently an average of four hours of sleep a night is bad for cognitive function - fortunately, that's been upped to 6-9 hours. Go vacation. Yay.), I'm putting a bunch of reviews together:

Ch 6:

"It's poor form to extend a conflict over unqualified foes for one's own amusement." - Dumbledore

I have to admit, THAT was a funny line I don't think I've ever seen before.

Actually, I don't think I've ever seen an evil Dumbledore with a sense of humor. Nice touch!

Ch 8: Nice! Really enjoyed the political scene.

Salazar posthumously adding J&L because "That was badass!"

This is gold! No, that's not right, this is PLATINUM!

Apparently already reviewed 3-5

It only now occurs to me that you might have been drunk the whole way through.

The writing isn't great for a sober person, but you were drunk at the time, so it's really very good for the circumstances.

LMAO