SMG4 Mario: I have 4 IQ and I say nobody cares! Nobody cares!
He is literally the most retarded character in all of fiction!

What the Fuck!
You don't make friends with your own parent's killer. Fuck this shitty story. And if that flock is big and aggressive enough to kill humans, why are they not killed yet? I am not really into writing reviews but this is beyond idiotic and stupid. You really should get a reality check.

cheren replaced lenora not cilan and his brothers

please update your story is awesome

Keep meowth with his intelligence shown by designing robots and ashs training he could be very very powerful

Hey there! First off, this is a pretty good story for your first novel length fic. I have read the author notes and know that you realise that grammar is your weak point. That's a mark of a good author and also I have seen your improvement in these further chapters, although I still have a few more chapters to read. Apart from these few typos the flow of your story isn't disturbed. I can clearly read this without cringing at the mistakes because you are still in the flow. To make do get a beta reader, ask for someone who wishes to help and will not ditch you off unexpectedly. Ignore all the flamers, if they are such an expert that can write something worth reading!

Onto the story, the plot line, dialogues, Pokemon raising and emotions, their training and Ash's growth is written well. There are some cliche points but those couldn't have been avoided. I haven't yet found a major mistake that will make me quit reading this piece, so good job. I am gladly following and favouriting(if that's a word) this fic.

My only problem you could say, is the screen time for other Pokemon. For example apart from once when they were introduced I haven't yet seen Meowth or clefairy. Start rotating Pokemon and get them some screen time.

Second you are typing pikachu as a him most of the time, when pikachu should be a female and thus it should be 'she' please correct those when mentioning it further ahead.

Other minor mistake is clefairy hasn't evolved yet but a few times I have seen it written as clefable. I am confused, whether clefairy is the final evolution or clefable. I am not sure what the correct evolution stage is but please look into this.

All in all this is a story worth reading and following. I am looking forward to hearing from you and reading this work to its completion.

Cheers,
HBK.

Please update

You really need a beta for your story to help polish it up. There's a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes which detract from your storyline, and that's a bad thing. You're also switching POV frequently, sometimes mid-paragraphs or even sentence which is confusing, make sure you stick to one POV for a while before changing. You should also be careful about what inspirations you take from other stories. Having Mew be Ash's mother? Totally fine. Start mentioning Mew Games? Now you're pulling ideas straight from other people's stories (Child of Mew), that's just not kosher. Also be careful about giving Ash a lot of Pokemon, it makes it harder for you to develop each one as a character in their own right. Ashes of the Past handles this is a really good way by having segments that look at how the Pokemon that aren't with Ash are doing. In all, you've got some interesting ideas but you need to just give it a bit more of a push.

good battle

Id love this to continue

Please update soon. The story is incredible. I can’t wait for more.

Plz update soon

Who wouldnt want a phione

What about skitty and cleffa

Wow... I can almost taste the blandness.