I'm gonna be honest here, you failed in the behavior department. The normal reaction to being dragged into a bad situation is meant to be anger yet he showed indifference. Also if he's been on the run for years why is he so lackluster in terms of ability and personality. Bearing the outsiders mark changes a person, no one can stay the same. It's like giving naruto a sharingan and keeping his happy-go-lucky persona, it just doesn't work.
Apart from all that the story is... meh

Welp, there goes Slackjaw as stew.

I'm liking your execution of rough and rogue Jaune!

So, is this dead? It seems dead.

I liked it.

I hope this will continue one day its really good

yeeee BOIIIIIIIII XD

morrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Thank you foradha this.

I have thought about doing a RWBY/Dishonored crossover like that, with Jaune getting the oursider's mark. Let's see how this goes!

Hmph, I always thought Ozpin to not be trusted, both in canon and almost every other fanfic out there. Manipulative bastard. I guess Jaune's biological father is a part of Ozpins' inner circle.

Grrreeeaaatttt, now they have Atlas and the manipulative Schnee after them. I honestly hope dies a gruesome death, preferably by Rats via Outsider Runes!

Dammit Blake. Wtf?

Screw Jaune's biological father! It seems he's one of those zealots if his attempted murder of his own son and only child is any indication.

Damn, Roman is either very crafty or ridiculously lucky to have found a counter for the Outsider's runes.