this got rather confusing at times.. and frustrating, how could Bella not realize already? it is plainly obvious, she has all the clues! ..also i don't get how could she have been so depressed about Edward leaving or so in love with him.. she already felt some of the bond with Rose therefore it shouldn't have been possible for her to love Eddie-boy so much..

Why didn’t you finisub

i first read this over 3 years ago, when i finally found it again yesterday i was ecstatic. it would seem you have a very high IQ, and use descriptions of visualisations to form your writing, which is a very good way to write. Your grammar is pretty good for your age, you have a couple mistakes here and there where i can tell you cut off an idea before it was finished, and 2 or 3 miss-used words, but those things come with age, reading and experience. i absolutely adore this story, thanks so much for writing it. it is giving me inspiration to continue my fictions! Thank you and God bless!

this is awful

I would like to see an update to this story. Though it does seem that the story is becoming a lot more complicated to read. I didn't understand half of what was said in this chapter but I enjoy the story line to much to stop reading it. Best regards, C.C.

Please continue please

I have noticed that my original review was not entirely accurate. I find that the writing form is very different in its style and stance, but also is a construct understandably yours to make. You have made a decision on what your stand in writing styles is and isn't. I commend you for that. This is a very interesting story, yes, but something is off about this particular case of forum. I believe you made somewhat of a miscalculation, the reason I say this is because the points of view are too close in their procedure of one another that the story becomes confusing as to who's point of view we are reading the story from. This is just an observation and not a flame, and merely my thoughts and criticism. Please continue to be an amazing writer despite crass criticisms from me and others.
TJ

I have noticed that your writing style is very similar to the ones I have read in old Greek stylings and that it must be read in a certain contextual view and that means either of two things:
1) You use descriptions in to complex a variety of adjectives and adverbs. Or,
2) You have a complex way of thinking and my just be too smart for me.
But your writing is amazing and vividly compelling. Keep up the good work in all of this audaciously used forum of writing style.
TJ.

Please, please update

Please continue please

Please continue please

please continue please I really love this

I just found this fic and I loved it! Keep going, pls!

Why the hell would Paul be doing the speaking? Shouldn't Sam be considering he's the Alpha? lol In any case, interesting story so far, there's minor grammar errors here and there but nothing terrible~

love it!