Oh that was very nice lemon, it's a little shame that wasn't longer :)

Fake and galhey

*wipes up blood from nose* that was hot

That was awesome really really good.

I liked it a lot! Especially for being the first one you've written. I was a bit rushed in places and there could have been more detail here and there, but overall it was enjoyable. Keep up the good work and master pieces will be popping out of that pretty mind of yours in no time.

A word of advice though, is patrolling around for summaries with LEMON in them and taking down those stories. So if you want, just change the description to be mum lemon, dont want the story being taken down!

Great job

May