There are to many his in. Like for example "combed his finger thourgh his hair" is the second his post a by my? Check that out will you, cause that was bugging me. Any way your a great writer.

Aww. I honestly didn't expect this awkward-funny-fluffy story to turn into smut so soon, but eh, fuck it. It's Shizaya. (Just, how for heaven's sake could you do the do on a trampoline?! Seriously confused over here xD) I especially liked the ending :)

Oh Izaya is going to be so sore after this like tomorrow or later that night

That was awesome, cute, amusing and excellent, I loved it and nice job but you need to proof read this, there are some mistakes (not trying to be mean)

Overall it was a nice story, I do like these two together like this a lot but can you write a brotherly comfort story with Shizuo and Kasuka where Kasuka gets attacked or something and Shizuo rescues then comforts him

Keep going with this pairing too