Very good and interesting, exciting, some Drama and darkness I like it very much please write more that would be great.

Love the story! Please, please update soon!

Are you ever gonna update or have you abandoned this story? If you haven't abandoned it,I hope you update soon!

Please update your story it's so good!

great story but please where is the rest of your story !

Keep posting love it!

Please continue this! It's very interesting!

This is quite interesting. I like that you're keeping Emma and Pan in character and not making either of them into lovesick puppies. I really hope you continue this, I've really enjoyed it.

Still a Lost Swan.. This Story is very Interesting, please Continue On.
I love your Writing Style & it to be not explained much just to explain in our own but in insightfull Hard words.. The Characters are very Well & the way you pointed out Pan aren't as much usual considered to other Fics I've Read which I like , Very expected from Regina that I like too.. but I would them to speak louder in their thoughts like to control over them more disguarded . Protective
For the Story I expect a twist , i don't know how it'd go expet what it normly be. I like to see Emma feel Sick ofcourse inworldly & goes in Depression . Pan to be strongly scary & unpredictable & to not sound as he seems & to emma to feel pan somewhat different in any sort.. I'm not forcing but just sharing my twisted mind
Please Continue on

Interesting story so far but if does get that kiss and lets them go, he will die later when that hourglass runs out unless Pan found some other way to live forever although I guess Pan could still get Henry to give him his heart so Pan could live forever and be back to full power and then after that Pan could just replace Henry's heart with one of the lost boys hearts and no one would know for the most part.

Interesting... I LOVE IT! She needs to kiss him already!

Cool story. I hate to say this but Regina is right. Pan's obviously got a plan but if he says he'll free Henry, Emma should at least think about taking the deal.

This is AMAZINGLY written. Your tone is spot-on and the characterization matches with the show exactly. I LOVE it! :-) Just one thing. A dash is different from a hyphen, and there is no space. It looks like this:

"...waltzing up to us-and we're just going to ignore it?"

not:

"...waltzing up to us- and we're just going to ignore it?"

Also, ellipses (the three dots trailing off to combine sentence fragments) are made without a space, as well. Anyway, you have an incredible vocabulary!

This is such a great story and you clearly have so much talent. I'm following it!
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I love this story! Keep it up!

Love your story! Please continue it soon!