The concept is okay. The grammar will need to be edited (Which I'm working on at the moment for you as time goes on).

As far as crossovers go, I would like to say that if you are doing a crossover where X crosses into the world of X then you should keep it as those two worlds crossing over. It'll be easier to maintain that way. The only way I see it being different is if you bring these series into a world you created. As in make your own canon. You can try to use the canons of the series themselves, but you need to work those canons around your story and manipulate them to a degree.

But it's still an okay start.

Oh this is getting more good every minute. I look forward to seeing a lot more.

Another good one, keep the story going dude.

Oh you are, but you know, the thing I am missing is the music that you used to put in your stories that lets us know what we are fighting. I kinda hate the silence feeling that we get with these scenes now. It's like we are watching a fight, but with no epic music to back it up that fits the theme well. I use to remember reading your stories while also playing the music with that scene, and it fits just so well with it.

Other than that, excellent chapter and everything.

It is way way way better now dude. Keep going.

No more narrator, well that was a great thing dude, but great revise tough.

I have to say and admit that I'm quite happy to see and know that you're finally doing the Director's Cut of MegaMan Battle Network: A NetNavi and a Mew Mew and that I look forward to seeing the strong and unique progression of this story Musashi. I have no idea or clue on what new crossovers that you're planning on adding with the returning ones from the original story Musashi, but if you're willing to accept a couple of suggestions from me, here are some that I know will help make your story even better:

Futari wa Pretty Cure
Mahoromatic
Magic Knight RayEarth
Fruits Basket
Ultra Maniac
Koi Koi 7
Fushigi Yugi
Blue Seed
YuYu Hakusho
FullMetal Alchemist
Galaxy Fraulein Yuna
Girls Bravo
Zatch Bell
Disgaea
Ranma 1/2
Flame of Recca
Sorcerer Hunters
Nurse Angel Ririka
School Rumble
MAR: Marchen Awaken Romance
Martian Successor Nadesico
Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha
Slayers
Love Hina
Rosario to Vampire
El-Hazard
Dual! Parallel Trouble Adventure
Katekyo Hitman Reborn!
D-Gray Man
Blue Exorcist
Psyren
Rurouni Kenshin

As I said before Musashi, this is just a couple of suggestions from within sight and that you don't have to do them if you don't want to, but still, it would be quite nice to see and know that you'd be able to at least use some of these series to help improve the strong quality of the Director's Cut. I look forward to reading the Director's Cut of your story Musashi and that I'll also help you out whenever you need it from within the given chance and opportunity. Good luck my friend.

Great job dude with the revision. I think it would be great to insert cartoons in it as well.