I'm happy I decided to read this again. Your writing has really impoved I like it keep it up.

Welcome back! This long wait was worth it! Another great chapter! I hope you continue with this story, bc I love you're writing.

Great chapter! I was so excited to see it! I hope you Update again soon

Hi, I love that your OC isn't OP or some bloody Mary Sue. I really enjoy your changes to the Twilight universe and your version of Bella is a lot more enjoyable than the one in the actual books. And no more sparkles! Love it. Can't wait for you to update.
Have a nice day /Nea

Glad you are back and happy to read a new chapter after so long :) I agree and really welcome the approach of a OC that is not powerful on the physical profile. It is easy to write about a character that can beat everything down and done end of story (Hence I don't prefer to read fanfic with God-like OC although there are exceptions when the plot is really good). The ability of the author is shown through the characters and their development. To have a character succeed regardless of their flaws is not easy to develop and think through. It requieres time and real effort from the author and I appreciate as a reader that the author is giving their best quality work.

I'm glad you are writing this story again cant wait for Natalie to see Leah again.

Great chapter! Please update soon! And damn I knew Natalie was cynical and coldhearted but I didn't really expect the 'torturing people for knowledge' part of her. She kind of reminds me of the 'Angel of Death'... I still like her though

Update soon please...

Shes to weak

Your story has so much potential but Natalie is way to weak for a vampire of 700yrs she's more like a vampire a year or 2 old and her "gift"is absolutely useless Shea an of make her a badass or don't create an oc for Alain character at alk

Your oc is to weak she's 700yrs old she should be individually stronger than any single Cullen and after 700yrs be at least as competent a fighter as jasper sure she shouldn't be able to be the cullens in a 7on1 fight but in a 3or4 on 1 fight she should at the very least be able to escape your story has potential but you need to make her stronger

Great chapter! Please update soon! This is the first OC pov story I have ever really enjoyed so congrats! Great chapter, please update soon!

When are natalie and Leah gonna be together again duration during the battle

Great chapter! Please update soon!

I think i like jerry :) Greetings from Germany!