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Your writing style provide a fresh breath of air as it was a bit quirky compares to most stories I read. However one of the most unique thing about this was even with the constant shifting of prespective, you never managed to lost me. It was very well written.

It was also perhaps as realistic as you can get concerning this story, the progress was painfully slow and everything was a mess at the best of time.

I favourited the story in the past with the intention to read it but I don't know I never did, so glad I found this again through another story

this mc is booooring

What's the purpose of this fanfiction? the plot doesn't seem to progress any further and at this point i'm just waiting for her to get captured by danzo and spill the beans on the whole future thing. She can barely hold her own against bandits yet Minato already invented the Hiraishin. so it doesn't look like the end goal is changing the future. since Kushina's kidnapping it's like everybody else is growing up while MC is still the a kid

Oh Kakashi, the internal struggles are so difficult on him

Liking Nami’s rage here, hope she gets a taste for combat

I had this well-depicted Kunoichi look like Karasuba from Sekirei in my head. The upward-crescent description of her eyes sold it too

You did a spectacular job writing Namie’s trauma and road to recovery! Seriously, so many Naruto FF authors have the character get stupidly angst for the entirety of the story when they write an OC. Like they’ll seriously be, pardon my French, pussy-footing around from chapter 1 to completion. Love this story!

Kinda shocked how Hiroto and Kushina just get off completely for leading two genin into a battle where an S ranked missing ninja was present. If they had both survived then sure they might get off because he's the Sandaime's family and she's the jinchuriki but because one died you'd think there would be serious consequences besides the guilt. Don't think Kasuga's family (if he had any) would take that lying down. Not surprised that Namie doesn't blame either of them though. Other than that good work so far.

Kasuga’s death and the subsequent fallout hits heavy with emotions

Glad to read this story again, I hardly remember it so it'll be a delight to dive back in. Also, I'm liking the air of competence your OC has/is aiming for

gross I reread my old comment I posted all pissed off and I'm sorry lol I had gone countless sleepless nights reading this at the time and was upset about something or other. honestly coming back so much later to finish this and not really remembering all too much about it it was a good read and enjoyable finishing only the last 3 chapters in this sitting.

Good overall, but there were parts that were too repetitive, and elongated, probably due to omniscient pov and how all the character bleed into one mind. They all share similar troubles, and repeating their conundrum wasn’t necessary.

This seems overly drug out

sorry for my last review but dang was I upsetty spaghetti