Good ...I would have kept London an "underage" teenage girl around 17 years old ..it really is a great turn on to the readers ( me.)

Loved the plot of London still being a "virgin" that really is a turn on for me. The innocence adds so much more to the story.

I do wish that you would hav e described "London's " body in full detail from her petite asian body to her developed breasts probably 30-C or 32-A to maybe an 32-B cup with her delicious so suckable, nouth-watering nipples rose-colored erect, hard pointed pert tits...downwards to her flat belly and her almost bald virgin extremely tight "virgin" pussy. detailing the appearance of Zach's cock enterinbg her pussy slit spreading it open while her pussy muscles squeeze and milk Zach's dick, his balls banging against her body...

Loved your story ..Keep on writing more ..looking forward to reading many stories from you.

nice

That was the hottest thing I had ever read. Good Job! :)

This was good. :)
It seems like London doesn't have to worry about being a virgin anymore.

Well, anyway, great one-shot and can't wait to read more stories. 'Til next time. ;D

That was not bad! It's kinda hard to think ditzy London going like that, but sure helps! Keep it up!

Hot story. Great job.

Very interesting. I love it.