This story is so I can't even find a word to describe it!

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Still didn't explain what she was scared of. I guess that doesn't really matter now, but I'm still curious.

Um, I think I found a glitch or mistake. Chapter 13 is the exact same as chapter 12. It still says THE CURSE wherest the title selection bit says Hopeless! Is it the same for anyone else?

Also yeah more chapter's!

You're doing a great job! Keep it up! I hope you will update this fanfic soon! Oh, and one more thing. Will Waka have a part in this story? I mean, it's Waka! He's awesome, IMO!

Even God's need a bit fun now and then via jokes or mischievous. I've always like God's that more like us then we think they are, it gives more personality besides a stern always serious. Anyway I love this chapter, took awhile, but I really shouldn't be expecting this to go quicker.

I like this very much, I hope to see more soon.

Great story
Okay but first a critique. For being Chibi's twin, you don't really see any of their relationship in this story do you? Will this be explored later?

And second… Akime is a great character! And your fight scenes are totally believable, unlike most fight scenes. Will we ever see Akime turn human (basically I'm wondering if her "love" will be another wolf or a human)

Keep it up!

Chapter 6 is hard to read for me since, I don't know if anyone else can see, a bunch of strange codding littering the chapter. But I really like 2 main characters (Forever loving the Poncle's3) and the fact that there are 3 sun gods in this. Triple the crazy demon slaying snowy's! c:

Moooooore! It's such a good story! I would love to see more and see Akime and Hiraku delve deeper into adventure!

the silver saiyan:

so far so good keep it up will you :) :)