Interesting chapter. Good story.

You're in COLLEGE? The scholastic standards in this country are in SAD SHAPE.

I have mentioned incorrect words in past reviews, but for a COLLEGE STUDENT to repeatedly use then(I.e. and then this happened) instead of than(I.e. more than) is outrageous. And I have yet to point out heal instead of heel, and other similar errors. I am encouraged to see that you are trying to recruit beta-readers, as you are sorely in need.

I still like the plot. It twists and spins where I least expect it.

However, you are consistently using the word DEFIANTLY when your meaning is definitely DEFINITELY. THESE WORDS ARE OPPOSITES. The root of defiantly is DEFY.(not going to). Definitely implies expectation of ABSOLUTELY DOING something.

Please be more careful with your words.

The plot is intereting. However, tauntinsult, TAUT tight. Be careful.

Please look up thhhe word DEFIANTLY. I thhink you'll find it does not mean what you think it does. Writers need to be careful, for they can easily confuse the reader.

Cute filler.

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Meh, it takes all kinds.

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I have a strange sense of deja vu.

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I thought it might have been Hojo, but I don't think he had green eyes. Maybe 'cause the manga was in black-and-white and most Japanese have darker eyes, even though Kagome had blue eyes.

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So you did. Well then. Naraku may qualify as a bishie, but damn if that wasn't disturbing. Was the rape really necessary?
Also, if you haven't already, please stop giving away your plot points in stories - . -

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...Please don't make Kagome do what I think you're about to make her do.

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Actually, Naraku is sort of hot, is a dark, twisted, tentacle-y way. Alright, that sounded way more hentai than I had planned, ehe - . -'
And the only one I know from the series who has green eyes is... Shippou. Or Ayame. Either option is superbly creepy...

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Maybe a bit thick, our favorite Inu-Hanyou is usually way too obtuse for his own good XD

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Yeah, I never thought the whole Sess/Kag thing was realistic, let alone good. *cringe*
The fact that so many stories out there, some well-written some... honestly want to make me gouge my eyes out, twist the IY universe and it's characters to fit their own purposes is hideously absurd. Many don't even try to keep them in character through all the different situations they dream up, just tack on the names of the Inu-tachi to people who match their general description, canon pairings or otherwise.

Part of me is hoping InuYasha will get the crazy idea to enter the tournament himself, and whoop Naraku who is obviously underestimating him. Hey, I can dream, can't I?

Love,
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Oooh, three wishes. Beware the 10th generation wishbringer *waveshandsominously*
Oh god, the nostalgia - o -

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