Kinniku Yay Yay

Interested in this revival!

All Hail Obiwan 1527 San, \(o)/

Kinda sad to see that this hasn't been updated yet. Ah, well...

Yeaah! It's finally updated! xD
I've been waiting for the new chapter!

Honestly, I like how you carry on the story. The pace was good, the scene was cute. Yes, I especially like that little scene where they're drawing together. xD

I'd like to give you suggestion. This was what my past beta-reader said to me in my early days as a fan-fiction author (lol) and I think it is indeed true. When you change the setting (place), you should use a line break, a horizontal line, that divides the two different setting. That way, in my opinion, would make the transition clearer to the readers.

Secondly, I am pretty sure Haruka's hair color is purple or violet; so, she's not a pinkette.

Good job on this! Keep writing!
I'll be waiting for the next chapter AND that Kengo x Sasami oneshot!

This is pretty good. I love MasatoxHaruka pairing! Please update.

NIIIIIIICE! Wanna see the next chapter of this.

Well Haruka certainly has good chemistry with that muscle maniac Masato. They should've been made into canon pairing!

What's more important is, this story is interesting and your English isn't bad, certainly better than mine. Keep up the good work! Let's liven up this fandom!

- Takagi -

Its really to bad hat this awesome anime doesant have a very active fanfic base...
Anyways, I like what has happened so far and am looking foward to seein how this turns out as a different pairing!
I wish you good luck on his :D

Iam with you...
loved the fan fiction...
there were many indicators which showed masatoXharuka.I first felt very soso about this as I thought no one noticed. iam glad... there are more who noticed and that iam one among them.
And exactly true there are like yui shop in angel beats

Interesting seriously Masato need more love...