Reviews for HP: Mage of Steel
Guest chapter 4 . 7/25
More chapters please. Is voldy gone for good? Was the soul piece in his scar the only one or did the goblins track down and destroy all the others. Did he get back his cloak. Did hermione, Neville and Luna go to hogwarts still?
Polydicta chapter 4 . 7/15
's good so far.

It's a shame that your muse has moved on from this tale - it has so many possibilities.
dragons9 chapter 4 . 1/7
This is good...please update...will this mean that Harry will have 2 wives...I do wonder when he will meet Kara..will he ever go back to england?...hope Sirius gets out soon...
Yut Taha Aki chapter 4 . 12/28/2019
Please please update the story please please update update please update the story please please update please please
BaddieDZ2 chapter 4 . 11/19/2019
I hate you.
inuyasha16451 chapter 4 . 11/18/2019
OMG. Please please come back and update this awesome story soon
Soccerlover17 chapter 4 . 10/27/2019
Update please!
BRonze chapter 4 . 9/1/2019
Truly, I wasn't very surprised that the old fogies didn't do very much to Fumblemort. It'd highly likely he knows where all their skeletons are buried. But the fun'll really start when muggle-borns and half-bloods fail to arrive at the school and a check of the Hogwarts accounts shows refunds paid to those families. That's gonna cause a serious panic amongst the old fogies of the Wizengamott. They depend on those two groups to pay the bulk of the costs of the school for the purebloods. With those two groups not attending and not shopping in the Ally, that's a major hit their economy will take. And if Harry does the same thing every year for the next twenty, it's likely there won't be a Hogwarts after at best ten. There just aren't enough purebloods in the country to pay for all the staff and upkeep of the castle itself. So either the Ministry or the Wizengamott would fire Fumblemort long before that in hopes that Potter would stop and the muggle-borns and half-bloods will return. Of course, they'd also have to make everyone pay the same amount of tuition also.
I hope you can tie your muse down long enough to finish this someday. I was truly enjoying it.
Bronze chapter 3 . 9/1/2019
Oh hell! Things are going to go downhill on Sept. 01st at better then the speed of light and gossip combined! And with the Queen involved, Fumblemort's gonna be lucky if he has a knut to his name by the end of the night if not before!
Bronze chapter 2 . 8/31/2019
Now it starts? It started as soon as Goldturn got Harry to the healers! Now everyone knows Goblins don't like thieves and Fumblemort has set himself up as one of the biggest ones to date. So the Goblins are going to treat him as he so richly deserves.
Bronze chapter 1 . 8/31/2019
Good ol' Fumblemort the great. Always ready to destroy lives for his greater good. This is a good story that I'm hoping you'll continue till you finish it. Before the end though, I really want Harry to deal with BOTH Dark Lords fatally. They're the embodiment of the lyrics form the song by Tears For Fear Everybody Wants To Rule The World. Both of them want to rule the world but for different reasons.
GrumpyGrue chapter 4 . 7/19/2019
He didn't piss on them. Saying he pisses on them is not the same as actually doing it. :(
Pointer3109 chapter 2 . 5/5/2019
Some places have a charge of enabling child abuse. Which is:
" "permit" means to authorize or allow for the care of a child by an individual when the person authorizing or allowing such care knows or reasonably should know that the child will be placed at risk of abuse as proscribed by this subsection."
In addition, in my state, child abuse includes failure to protect the child. In other worlds, if you witness it you are responsible for stopping it as best you are able.
The penalty for child abuse or enabling child abuse is the same. Up to a year in the county jail or up to a lifetime in the state penitentiary, possibly with a fine of $500-$5000.
Child abuse is a serious accusation.
Oh, swinging a frying pan at a kid's head can be assault with a deadly weapon. I've seen it charged as such.
Good story.
Jacob Phantom chapter 4 . 2/7/2019
Please update your story soon!
Guest chapter 4 . 1/12/2019
- Girlfriends
Considering you're using Smallville that makes Donna a better choice than some of the other possible options.

As Diana isn't presented as that much older in the show. Ought to decrease the age gap from around 6 to 2-3 max between them.

There's also no issues with slower aging rates as between Kryptonians and mundane humans. As Amazons are pretty much ageless. Hippolyta, daughter of Ares BTW, was around during the Age of the Gods, when Hercules was performing his 12 Labours.

Powergirl aka Karen Starr aka Kara Zor-L would still count as s first cousin, even if she's from another reality.

The DCAU version of Supergirl could've been an option as she's not a member of the House of El, but the House of Ze.

(Although, the chaps in charge of the DCAU thoroughly violated Kryptonian naming conventions. As female Kryptonians from "Noble" houses are supposed to have their father's name in their full name. Kara Zor-El, Lara Lor-Van, Kal's mother and Allura In-Ze, Kara Zor-El's mother, would be examples. So Kara In-Ze should've been from the House of Ze, with her father's name being In.)

Anyway, as this is Smallville we're dealing with Kara Zor-El (and she's a first cousin again), unless you planned on retrieving the other Kara, as happened in the DCAU, and have her act under the Powergirl name.

So that there are two Kara's running around. Or rather than a Kara, you could have one of her sisters be the survivor Kalya , Kori (not recommended, more below) and Kari.

Ad for why not Kori?
Another potential match could've been Koriand'r, human name Kory Anders aka Starfire.

Bit obvious in her alien heritage true. But a Kryptonian-Tamaranean hybrid should prove to be far stronger than their parents. As Tamaraneans absorb any type of sunlight, not just yellow.

Should also prevent overcharging by blue sunlight (pulsar originated).

And while they do have a chromium allergy, the results are akin to the flu, so not nearly as debilitating as Kryptonite..

There's also the "stranger in a strange land" aspect, that he'd be able to understand better as a Kryptonian raised on Earth.

Laurel Gand aka Andromeda, s Daxamite could've been another option, although she was rather xenophobic initially

And while I considered Caitlin Fairchild aka Fairchild from Gen13, she'd still have the aging problem. Unless you were thinking of having a witch a la Hermione undergoing it, though she's not a green-eyed redhead. ;-P

Same kinda applies to Mary Batson aka Mary Marvel.

M'gann M"Orzz aka Megan Morse aka Miss Martian could've been another option, but I'm not sure about Martians and Kryptonians being able to interbreed. (Kryptonians and Tamaraneans have both interbred with humans, so good chance that they can breed with each other as well.)

Plus no synergy in their abilities. And adds a possible fire weakness.

- Friendship
" dialNforNinja" has a point regarding Lex. "CrazyDan" dealt with that angle in his "Awaken Sleeper". Security angle there are magical NDA.

And I know that "ScifiFan33" is doing similar things with his " Death Comes to Smallville" series, with obliviations if they react badly like Pete did.

- Hide and Seek
' WhiteElfElder" and " power214063" make decent points about finding Kara early.

- Weakening
One way to explain why Harry isn't as strong as Kal or Kara is his magic.

A physical body can only hold a certain amount of energy without risking harm (see blue sunlight, which can shorten the lifespan).

Harry also has his magical core and that limits the amount of sunlight he could absorb.
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To use fictitious numbers to clarify.

If a body can hold 100 units of energy, than Harry has to subtract from that number because of his core. Let's say it's 40 units, with the average magic user at 20.

That would mean that he can only absorb 60 units of sunlight, unlike Kal or Kara, who can take in 100.

Problem explained away as to why he's physically weaker than Kal.

By contrast, he has Occlumancy to help shield his mind from mental attacks. Clark has zilch.

Clark is as susceptible to magic as the average human, whereas Harry IS a magic user himself, so he does have some defenses.

So just because he's physically weaker, nor as quick as Kal, he makes up for that by being less vulnerable over all.

Seems like a fair trade to me
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