Srry, but I like to comment only on the most recent chapter. Anyway, this is a great story, plz continue!

COOL STORY BRO #KOBY

:O pleease update3!:D

Interesting ! :) Where are they taking Ellie? Is she being sold to slavery? Update!

Please update

this is really good :)

Nice intro , i really am hocked in this fanfiction already, but try not to be cliche with this one

This chapter is very rushed and obviously not proofread. You need to clean up dialogue as well as slow down so we actually know what's going on. More background info is still needed and please put some better characterization into Tommy. Have Ellie question him more about what's going on and why he suddenly changed from a good leader to...whatever he is now. He leaves me very confused, but the appearance is so choppy I don't have time to care how he got into this state.
Ellie is kind of passive...I mean, she doesn't even realize for two years what the people of Jackson are turning into? Jackson isn't an unfamiliar place to her, but it almost seems like it is. Again, add more imagery. I'd like to know what people look like and what Ellie's surroundings look like.

Although the beginning dream sequence is interesting, I think more tension could have been added. It was a good hook, but it was very quick, so I didn't have much time to wonder why Joel was having a nightmare.
This chapter is a bit all over the place, in the sense that some background info is missing, such as the fact Joel has a cane and what happened over the two-year gap once Ellie and Joel had returned to Jackson. Has Ellie changed in any way? What is she wearing that makes Joel think it's immodest? Some imagery is missing, too.
I liked the flashback, but you should have differentiated it from the present time of the story.