Hey Toxic! I'm an anon who just got into your series: was it two weeks ago? Anyway, I found the first one on a best SYOT list. And it was so good. Now I'm addicted: I finished the second one last night and was up until 3:00 AM reading. It was just like a published book to me. But here are my critiques:

I know it's always like this at the beginning and it's too late to edit, but it feels like there are so many storylines going on at once. Game maker rebellion, escort rebellion, D4 rebellion, tributes, Charity and River, Xen and her family.. It's just a lot. Maybe focus a little more on the tributes until there are less and so it's easier to follow.

This time I feel like the tributes are so likable. My favorites are Lexie, Lorelei, Ross, and Luke, but I like almost everyone. I can already tell my heart will break like it did with Reed last book. Luckily Rayann survived.

Also I hope there's not another D2 girl going nuts again. If it's again that's a little too much. But hey, D4 is actually in it!

I love it so far. Keep writing and I'm looking forward to reading the next book and hopefull submitting in the one after that!
Love, An Anon

Just wanted to let you know I'm still reading! Slowly... so slowly... but I'm here! Trying to divide my time between this and Hunt or be Hunted so I don't fall too behind on that one, but school's also been kicking my butt, so I've been a bit slow. But yeah, still here - even if I know how this ends, it's fun to see how everything's going to get to that point.

But ahhhhh, Carlie's death! I knew it was coming the moment they walked into that jellyfish room - there's no reason those things would have been there unless they were going to be plot-relevant somehow - but still, ack. Poor Carlie. While I never *liked* her (as in, I'd hate to meet her on the street), she was by far one of the most interesting characters, and honestly, one of those I think deserved most to win. Like man, no one worked the Games like Carlie. In the beginning she was this Southern Belle sort that I had totally written off as a bloodbath, but she managed to get so far without either discovering some insane weapons talent she never knew she had or getting some kind of unfair advantage (coughcoughLexiecough). She worked with what she got, and it was awesome. Death by out-manipulation was a fitting end for her, although I have to admit, I'm sad we never got to see her meet up with Trojan and Seb again. Ah well, in SYOTs there's always loose ends because everyone's got to die, so it's no big deal. Getting killed by Pullox was still a good end to her story. RIP Carlie, you were unexpectedly awesome.

Oooh, and Ruth's ratting out the rebels. Heh, that's not going to go well when she finds out it really is her daughter. Ruth's always seemed a bit unhinged, but from what I remember from the HuOBHu prologue, she was even crazier there, and I feel like this is the move that sets off that spiral.

Sidenote: Iopian better be okay after this. He's my favourite victor and doesn't deserve more sadness

I was genuinely scared for Lia until it was revealed that Pullox was the one doing Lexie's voice XD Just the image of him sitting alone in a room screaming like Lexie cracks me up. Also, when did he get so good at mimicking voices?

I kind of figured Lia wouldn't die yet since we already lost Carlie this chapter (although to be honest I'd rather Lia died than Carlie), but I'm betting she's not going to last much longer now. Actually, I'm shocked she's made it all the way to the final 8. But yeah, now her mentor's in trouble, and Pullox is out for her blood, and superpowered Lexie hates her - things aren't going to go well for Lia. I don't want to say she's going to be the next death, because I'm always wrong with that kind of thing, but... yeah, I think she might be the next death.

Aw I was not ready for Willow to die.

Mr. Gorbachev

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I think she will. Ido love baths.

Night owl

I would have saved Ross. I really liked him for some reason.

Heyo, it's me again, swinging by with another one of my random interval reviews. Although this one isn't as random because I heard you just posted the prologue to your new SYOT and my tribute got in, so thank you so much for accepting him! I'll read and review as soon as I can, I'm just hoping to get through COBC first so I don't get anything spoiled. But yeah, thank you!

Anyways, review for this chapter. Man, Willow's just getting all the allies, isn't she? Makes me a bit worried for Mirane and Darius, because Willow's got a pretty bad track record of having allies die around her. Mirane seems pretty tough/careful though, so hopefully she'll be able to keep them all alive.

And Career drama! Whoo, my favourite thing XD Oh man though, that's awful about Lorelei's baby. I can't believe Jericho and Lorelei were so quick to blame Honora though, after both of them had already expressed their distrust for Pullox. Like, really, guys? PULLOX WAS THE ONE WHO "FOUND" THE VIAL IN HONORA'S BAG, YOU REALLY DON'T THINK HE COULD HAVE JUST SLIPPED IT IN THERE? Also if Honora wanted Lorelei/the baby dead, she probably would have just killed her/left her to die way back when they first found out about this. GODDAMMIT GUYS, THINK FOR A SECOND. But also don't, because, eheh, I do like Pullox and I'm kind of glad he's flying under the radar. But I also like Honora... and man, how ironic would it be if she died as punishment for like, the one kill she'd never have committed?

Carlie's still chilling, I see XD That was an awesome Pan's Labyrinth moment there. I keep wanting to see her showdown with Trojan and Seb, but I'm also a bit worried, because as it stands, she's got absolutely no chance at fighting them, so it might not be the ultimate showdown I was hoping for. Mind you, if Trojan's not wanting to take another sip of the vial, that could lead to him getting captured/beat up by Carlie, and then Seb would have to come in and kill her. Ooh, that'd be some intense development for Seb.

Also, ahhhhhh, I'm so torn with Seb right now. This addiction to the victor's vial isn't going to go anywhere good, but it's interesting that, at least for the moment, he's still able to hold onto his morals. I mean, Trojan's super amoral and I love him for it, but he needs Seb there to balance him out. Don't know how much longer they'll last with this vial drama though. Also, the flashback was a super nice touch!

And Rayann's part, ooh. I'll admit, I've never been a huge fan of her, but I think it's impossible not to feel sorry for her at this point. People just keep wanting to kill the poor girl. Who was responsible though? I mean, the obvious answer is the Capitol, but I feel like the unsubtle assassins approach is more the rebels' style - I feel like the Capitol should be smart enough to realise trying to kill the Hunger Games victor by getting them in a situation where they can fight there way out of it (and also totally giving up the element of surprise beforehand) is not the greatest plan. But then that would beg the question as to why the rebels would want Rayann dead. Ahhhh, what's going on?

So yeah, just figured I'd check in and let you know I'm not ignoring Hunt or Be Hunted - just want to try and get through this one first (although depending on how fast I read, I might have to just give it up and deal with the spoilers). But yeah, still really enjoying this and can't wait to see what happens next!

Sorry for the extremely late review , my laptop BSOD me so I had to send it for repairs and I didn't want to type everything out on my phone because autocorrect will duck ( See?) everything up buuut my laptop isn't going to come back to me for a week so I'm forced to do it on my phone now :'( . Oh and I got lazy . Yea laziness is probably the bigger reason .

I think it was pretty obvious I was rooting for Trojan after Honora died ( I mean decided to take some time off the Toxicverse to rule her planet and give a review ) but I will admit that it was fitting for Trojan to die . I think I'm the only one still interested in the concept of the 7 deadly sins . You see my favourite part of all 7 deadly sins stories is to witness how ironic and fitting the deaths of the sins incarnate are . I think I got this obsession after watching 'Se7en' . Anyways Trojan imo definitely displayed his sin when he was crying and looking at Mirane pointing the gun at him . He was jealous of Mirane . It didn't feel fair to him , he fought so hard and went through hell and back to survive and now his chance at survival was just snatched away when it was at its closest to him . So yeah he totally could be interpreted as breaking down in jealousy to me at least . Then as Mirane stated he made a mistake lunging at her desperately trying to take the crown away for himself so I guess that Envy was a part of his downfall ? I hope so because I want the 7 deadly sins thing to come to a nice ironic end :c . Besides the Sloth winning is such perfect irony . So thank you for rounding up the 7 deadly sins stuff nicely :D .

I already stated waaaay too many times why I love Trojan ( I mean I love him way more than Carlie now so I'm glad he kicked the bitch's ass out ) and I think repeating the sentiments after the 10th time would make me and everyone else puke out blood . But I think I'm going to do it one last time for Trojan :') . He was the perfect cold and cynical tribute . Ok I'm done . I am honestly amazed by all the development he went through and even though I said I got over his death pretty quickly in the forum , the more time that passes the sadder I feel about his death . To be honest I feel that if he became Victor his end would be even more tragic than Mirane's . The only people he loves and care for are his parents ... I don't know what to say other than to thank you for making Trojan what he is . He was an outstanding tribute . I guess Trojeb can come true in the skies above :') . Rest in peace Trojan . He definitely stole my heart :)

Congratulations Mirane ! I'm glad you went the 'Happy Victor ' path (Before the baby drama that is ) and not the 'Ew I'm so fake omg the Capitol changed me omg I feel so guilty omg I'm as bad as the Capitol' path because tbh that path was used like a billion times in the SYOT world. I mean even you used it for Rayann XD . But yea it was refreshing to see a happy Victor glad about surviving this event for once instead of a whining destroyed Victor :) . I'm still a little bitter about Mirane winning because she was like THE most obvious Victor by far but I have to admit that she IS a great Victor ... It's just idk ... I see so many Victors having the same type of journey as her . The stone cold survival girl who softens up to an ally and eventually fall in love with him journey . I'm sorry if I offended you but I just don't like so many Victors having the same history . I mean she had an awesome story if you looked at it on its own but once you think about the abundance of Victors from other SYOTs it's just ... Agh . Not to say that she was a copy from all those victors . God no . She was way more developed , deeper and badass than them . It's just that I wanted a change for once . But again if you looked on her story on its own it's a fucking fantastic one . I won't deny that she is a great Victor for the Toxicverse :) . Oh and btw I have a headcanon that she and Rouge Lockett are in the same arena and become allies and start shooting people up xD . I mean it's just cool thinking about them with their backs against each other . One with dark skin the other with pale skin . One with the gun and one with the bow . Both 'ice queens' with a knack for acting . And well both got knocked the fuck up . It would be an awesome alliance *.*

I absolutely loved the way Mirane carried herself through the Capitol's drama . She did it like a true Victor . She really is fantastic at manipulating people , be it individuals or the masses . That's a skill I like XD .

Holy fuck I did not expect that pregnancy reveal at all . Well I thought about it but after when you said in the previous thread I'm like 'Nah he wouldn't do it ' but welp like Britney Spears you did it again and blew my ass off the seat (could be interpreted as sexual if you like ) . Can I just say that holy fuck why does 90% of copulation that happened in the arena results in a baby . Oooo this could be nice inclusion to the Toxicverse if the pills that prevent periods is introduced :0 . It's my headcanon since I was 13 and reading the first HG book that all tributes would take pills to stop them from pooping for 2 weeks XD. Omg I just realise ... Millions of people watched how Buster got conceived omg . The seed is strong indeed . Why the hell did Mirane let Darius nutted inside of her ? Ok sorry I forgot reviews are supposed to be PG13 .

Man all the developments you threw in for Mirane this chapter was absolutely mind blowing . And the fact that it didn't feel forced at all is a testament of your growing skills and talent . I love how Sloth still kinda has its grasp on Mirane when she felt like she couldn't take the burden of a baby . Mirane before this chapter was well not to say one dimensional but she isn't nearly as layered as she is at the end of this chapter . And you managed to do that all in a single chapter . Holy shit man XD .

Ok Huobhu is just posted and imma quickly finish this review off to read it XD . The game this year was the best you have ever done and probably the best in all of SYOTs and we have a great Victor in Mirane . I look forward to what is in store for the next games :) . This story will forever be an icon in the SYOT community XD .

Awesome fucking chapter !

I'm really interested to see where you go with the rebellion in the next story and how you are going to include district 13 and romantia. I can not wait for the next update.

Congratulations! I listened to this with my typical epilogue song for this series, have to keep tradition.

Its been an amazing journey, your best one yet in every aspect. The characters were all well developed, and it was all just genius.

The epilogues are always sad - especially those with no happy ending. Trojan's was especially sad, and in a way it's probably good that Trojan didn't win. He would have no family (really), and the Capitol would find a way to punish him horribly.

Leda's part touched me also - I really have no idea why I didn't like her at first. She was so entertaining to read about, and even rereading her first introductions.. I liked her. I can't see why myself and others didn't like her two years ago, but she was a great character who deserved a happier ending. The same with Hadley - his parents must feel awful, not that it was their fault.

Giovanni's epilogue was sad too, but I'm glad that his father did actually care.. not that it ended well for either one of them.

I have to wrap this up now but this was a beautiful ending to an incredible story. I can't wait to see how HuOBHu turns out, and I'm sure it will be just as great.

I'll see you there!

Well done on finishing this story on the anniversary you started it! Makes it feel all the more special ey?

The epilogue was pretty much all sad for everyone, I espeically felt sorry for the families of Pullox, Liz, Trojan (oh my god especially Trojan, his family was basically destroyed :'( Honora, Leda, Magnus, Giovanni, Willow and Delilah.

There is honestly something I could say about all these characters and their epilogues but I'd rather not drone on and just sum it up as a whole, I loved all their epilogues and each characters brought something different. There are a few who will always particularly stand out in my mind (I'm looking at you, Honora, Pullox and Magnus).

Apart from the actual tributes, there were other interesting epilogues as well, Rayann's was very sad. She has always had it difficult since finishing the games and I was happy she had a friend in Luster...but now thats all gone and shes back to being a recluse, hope she will recover over time. I was happy for Luster and Jynx though-as both seem to be on the mend, Jynx's more physical and Lusters emotional, and lets not even talk about Iopian...
I liked how in your story the rebellion failed, I honestly do as I think it is more realistic and you dont shy away from the more likely ending, even if it is a sad and brutal one. In saying that your world is extremely complex and theres always 2 sides to a story, in which characters I adore sit on both sides (Tobias, Luster, Jynx).

Anyways, congratulations on finishing this story, your writing improves with every story and I can tell you that from experience, I've been reading since you were writing KOBK! How many years was that ago now?

Can't wait for the next one and a new batch of characters!

Does it say something about me that I found Rayann's epilogue the saddest? It really bothers me that Luster and Rayann's relationship fell apart a little bit. It's nice to hear that Luster's doing well though. I guess it's important to remember that Luster volunteered for the games, and prepared for them his whole life. Even Jynx, who volunteered, was put in against her will twice. Glad that Jynx is ok by the way, but that medicine /definitely/ had a cost.

I definitely feel like you're going somewhere with both Lorelei and Mirrane's fathers running on similar platforms. Looking forward to whatever happens there.

I feel like Trojan's mother might have some future significance? Maybe not. I do wonder how different this might have been if Trojan had won, but I expect you would have given him just as tragic an end as Mirrane, so it might have been quite similar.

All of these endings were very sad, particularly Honora's. I really liked Willow's though. It seems like we all grew to really appreciate her in the games, and I'm glad that the citizens of 11 did as well.

Really looking forward to HuOBHu! Congratulations!

There's a lot to say here, almost too many thoughts coming at me at once. I do not know if this is because I could never fully comprehend how much I value this story, and where it took me in life, or if I just loved the idea of this story. The idea that 24 creators and one author could make a universe, a world, and develop love, life, misery, pain, and memorable characters in a shared series. That, to me, is truly the magic behind the curtain.

All of these characters's lives may have ended, but for many their life was to be held up and immortalized. Most of these epilogues were sad. I just kept imagining a tiny guy following these people around, playing a small somber tune with his pinky. Pullox's was creepy (those last two lines haunted me), Honora's was depressing, Hadley's was surprisingly uplifting, as was Willow's. Magnus was dark, I did not expect that reaction. And poor, poor Leda. Even in death, no one really seemed to care about her. I could say so so much more on this story, but I have already said so much. I could write paragraphs about each character in particular, I could write all about how I felt about the two years this story has been with me, and how odd it is now that it is ended. You all know how I feel about this saga, how much I loved every little tidbit of it.

It is with melancholy that I must say goodbye to COBC. No more amazing fights and insults from Honora, no more devious betrayals by Pullox, no more tender loving moments from Dirane, and no more heroics from Tear. I just...I feel sad to say goodbye to all those characters (for now). However, I know that whatever you have in store for the next story, I will be ready for that tenfold. Besides, I am sure this is not the last time we will hear from these beautiful folks.

Anyway, thank you for the journey. It has been one wild ride. :)

Jesus, right on the mark of the anniversary. Two years — not bad at all. You've really got this scheduling thing down-pat. XD

Not much to say about this chapter, aside from the fact that this story did not disappoint me one bit. It had all the thrills and chills of the previous two stories and even more. So many great moments, so many characters that I loved to love, and loved to hate. And the frustrating thing about it is that aside from Pullox, all these characters were so complex that they couldn't conceivably be considered evil or good. All gray, all complex. They all had fears and motivations.

I've already talked at lengths about my love for the divine Honora, and Mirane the Puma, our resident savior and Victor.

All these eulogies were quite sad, especially Magnus's. Nobody was alive to care about him, and those who did know him, mocked him and laughed as he died. At best, he'll be remembered as the nutjob prisoner who killed his parents. At worst, nobody will ever know or care who he was. People will look at him in the future and see a monster, and that's all he'll ever be.

Pullox's was also eerie. His parents were unsuspecting of his psychopathic nature. They never saw that side of him. His own sister, his morality-pet, was horrified. He was the monster they never even knew was there. A genius in his own right — and did great things, terrible as they were.

So Romantia just gave up on Thirteen? Jesus, this is mirroring reality during the Poland-German conflict. Now I don't know what the hell the rebellion plans to do. I don't want to believe it's over. I think another ally will come from an unexpected place. A place even the Capitol won't see coming.

I've said all I can say about this story, and where this book closes, another one opens. Who will be our unexpected heroes? All we can do is wait.

And now, I can FINALLY and happily add this story to my favorites. :)