Did you end up moving the rewrite to AO3 or something? I can't find anything on your page.

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It's an MMORPG of course they go buy some more. This isn't a fantasy medieval world. It's a video game

Good ideas but could use some work. You are trying it seams to use a modern capitilist economy in this, while it dosn't make sience. For example why run back to buy more throwing things? You would think you could get them for free or reduced as actual army supplyment occured durimg the middle ages for infintry.

Cannon fact i noticed is different kazuto is 14 ish at the start of SAO

Cant wait for the remake. Brilliant au please dont keep us waiting

I hate the fact that he didn't meet Klein right away.

Are you still alive?

When will the rewrite be up?

Hmmm, I guess I'll have to say Brilliant for every chapter. I love the new concepts you introduced. Also since you added mounts, will you add wings as cosmetics ? Not wings capable of flying, but just for cosmetics. You gotta admit they look badass

Damn brilliant

Brilliant, absolutely brilliant, all chapters

Kirito. I'm laughing at the bow and Sinon scene and at the same time, I'm just like: Kirito, such coincidence, much wow. Nice.

Hello, just to let u know, i completely agree with your idea of rewriting. At the start, the story was very interesting, however as it progressed, it became more and more redundant. Kirito leaves, grinds, comes back, shops, leaves grinds comes back, so on and so on. If you do rewrite it, if you could change it up a bit, that would be amazing. i understand that there is the repetition of the monthly event, but you can focus on more events on the side or something, rather than just glossing over it.

This is a good story. It's a shame that not many people know it. I guess in that sense, it is like (Death Game?), a fantastic story but not that much acknowledgement.

This (Aincrad) is different from the usual, but it is still extremely enjoyable. I especially like the (Mounts). The different occupations are also enjoyable to read about.
However, I agree that you need to fix this story. In some places, you seem to head somewhere before drifting off, and others, you mention something but leave it. For example, you seem to leave the wolf race hanging, with no mention of them later.
Kirito's power level also seems to be fluctuating. You should definitely check over to make sure it is inconsistent, and not make Kirito challenged at something he shouldn't be. I also wondered why Kirto hasn't fought on his mount during the special events. The enemies in the second event were something that Kirito fought frequently, and something he was overleveled for. Yet he never informed anyone how to fight them, nor tried to fight them himself. While there were many enemies, Kirito should have been able to at least draw a few away then kill them, and repeat. Especially if he was on Midnight. I mean, with the charging attack, Kirito would probably been able to injure and kill quite a few enemies, especially if he charged from the side as a hit-and-run.
Also, during the event fights, why do the players wait till the enemies come to them? I am sure that some players would be able to scout the enemy and maybe do some damage by the way. Also, how about a few troups stationed outside the city so that they could attack after the enemies push into the city?
When you rewrite this story, I recomend to leave this story behind and make a new one. If that is so, the people who want to read the former story will still be able to read it. I certainly know a few stories that were rewritten that I wished to see the first version.

Hey northerner I love this story and I would be glad to see it rewritten (as long as you post updates) and I wanted to suggest that you keep this story up and just make a note in the summary about the rewrite. This is by far the best sao fanfiction as I feel this could actually be a book or a game so having this one as well could stimulate people until some chapters come out. Thanks for making these stories.