Reviews for Jealousy |
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Maryfans chapter 14 . 7/19 Absolutamente maravilloso, muchas gracias por esta hermosa lectura |
Hope Sally chapter 8 . 3/23 Good piece here. The buildup is amazing and the sex is good too but since you've asked for review, here goes mine (hope you dont hate me too much for it) 1. Lisbon cries too much, just too friggin much, everytime they do it - pre and post coitus. I mean even during the act, there's tears. Kinda counter effective to the whole "finally-they-are-doing-it" vibe. 2. Too much talk during sex. Major turn off. Once they've got things going hot and heavy, I'm not thinking of their marriage or Jane's similarities with pilgrims. It's taken them 12 years to get here, they should be going wild, not talking, during sex. It should be hot, emotional yes, but talk heavy.. Nope pls 3. Anatomy words could be tender-er. Jane isn't the kind who'd say "My cock this" or "My cock that". He'd think more on the lines of arousal, length, flesh etc.. Eg, lisbon could feel his arousal through his hospital gown... Or Lisbon raked her fingernails lightly along his flesh as he slid into her... OR she stared at him wide eyed, half numb with pleasure as he thrust his length into her with a possessive grunt. Please dont hate me... I loved the way you've written everything.. It's just that the whole rhythm kinda kept breaking for me on and off because of the elements I've mentioned above hence the review. :) |
MartyMc49 chapter 8 . 10/10/2018 I’m hoping I haven’t reviewed this chapter before. Sometimes I double review and then it says I can’t post more than one. It’s just the last sentence is so FANtastic with Lisbon... “gesturing to the freshly scrubbed table and chairs” as an invitation to Cho to stay for supper. It is very hard to concentrate on the Volker aspect while Jane is romancing Lisbon the way he’s been doing. Oh my goodness, Jane really can pillow talk quite smoothly. It’s nice that you tempered Patrick’s smugness afterward with him entirely letting go for Teresa during their lovemaking. |
Grrarrggh chapter 12 . 7/22/2018 The Claddagh ring was a perfect idea. Buffy and Angel are touched too. |
Grrarrggh chapter 8 . 7/22/2018 Wow. Just, wow. In a good way. A great way. |
Grrarrggh chapter 10 . 7/4/2018 He's complaining about her threatening him?! Too often his entire relationship with her is one big unsaid threat. |
Grrarrggh chapter 7 . 7/4/2018 Actually, I always thought considering what a control freak Lisbon is that she, like most control freaks, would need to be dominated sexually to truly let herself go. At least that's what I've read on the subject. The dominator is the one who isn't trying to get off. |
Grrarrggh chapter 4 . 7/4/2018 Readers started hating on Lisbon?! I am firmly on her side and a bit shocked she can trust Jane so easily and that he's not self aware enough to realise his anger and pettiness was really uncalled for. |
Munkeyfump20 chapter 14 . 9/3/2016 This one was great you out did yourself very romantic, very sexy, very saucy, and very exciting and thank you for a very good read as it had me wanting to read more. |
MartyMc49 chapter 14 . 7/25/2016 How did I miss this delightful Patrick and Teresa story. The fluff was great - you always do an excellent job of conversations. The whole case they had to solve or die was also great - although I could only trust Patrick when he said it was Volker. How could the sex have been any better? It's just an overall A story that I'm sure I'll read again. |
Guest chapter 14 . 9/8/2015 Oh, I loved this story! |
Shoesarecool chapter 14 . 7/10/2015 Amazing! Love this story! |
Shoesarecool chapter 5 . 7/9/2015 I'm loving this story! |
Cutebeekeeper chapter 14 . 7/6/2015 Simply put: This was beautiful. |
Azucar chapter 14 . 11/9/2014 I loved it! At times I thought - there was no way this story was going to be finished in 14 chapters but u managed to do a great job! The M scenes were delicious and the case details and show references were on point! I think ur writing talent shone through beautifully! Patrick should buy Teresa more jewelery and they shoukd have more babies! Sugar |