Reviews for Our Secret |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Glad Zero got his love |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is really sweet; most fics like this don't use English grammar. |
![]() ![]() Yes, I did like reading this fic. I'm glad I did. Zero is so reluctant to admit he loves Kaname, which is... I mean, c'mon! Kaname's so damn sexy! I'm really happy that Zero and Kaname love each other. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow! I really like this fic! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved it! Absolutely loved it! I hope you write a sequel or something :3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() 金色琴弦. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really liked the plot and the sex was great but one little thing that bothered me was that you switched quite often from past tense to present tense, sometimes in the middle of sentences. Everything else was greatly written it just confused me a little so I had to mention it. |
![]() ![]() Loved it *-* |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think them admitting their love for each other without Yuki in the mix is debatable, but otherwise I thought this was brilliant very in character, until they started having sex, but then again, who actually knows WHAT Zero or Kaname would be like during sex, 'cause it never happened in cannon, so... XD Still, pretty good job on this. One thing I have to mention, though, is that the grammar was APPALLING. It was seriously awful. You kept switching between past and present tense. You can't do that. If the story is in present tense, all of it has to be in present tense. If the story is in past tense, all of it has to be in past tense. I understand the compulsion to write things that would still be true now in present tense (for instance, that Kaname's blood WAS delicious to Zero, and still IS delicious to Zero), but you can't do that in fics. Past tense basically means that, unless the character is speaking, "was" is the present tense verb, and "had been" is the past tense verb. I know it's confusing, and it's sometimes really irritating, but it's a rather important rule to follow, because otherwise one's writing can get VERY messed up and confusing and, quite frankly, a little annoying, even if one isn't as well versed in grammar as I am ) Still, as I said at first, this fic is awesome. The smut is HOT, I LOVED Kaname biting Zero near the end there, and Kaname pinning him is just beautiful. |
![]() ![]() Awww! That was amazing! I wish you would make it into a multi chapter fic! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lovely. More! |
![]() ![]() ![]() AWWWW! I am totally in love with this couple and fic! This was great! |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was hawt! I'm actually drooling while imagining this two :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() That. Was a really hot vk fanfic. I almost died reading it. It was so goood! XD |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my fricken god O.O That was hot :D the most perfect story I have ever read in a while! It's an absolute must for readers and a tray of freshly baked cookies and 8 boxes of pokey for the writer. I congratulate you, My Lord *deep bow* :3 |