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Hello whoever reads this story I am back with another chapter. Not gonna lie writing after such a long break is pretty difficult not to mention that I had to switch typing programs and now I don't know where everything is (my new computer didn't come with Microsoft office and to buy it would have cost me $150, so I just found a free typing program called OpenOffice writer online works good enough). Anayways big thanks to everybody who reads my story and an even bigger thanks to those who leave a review and for those of you who want to get into the shout-out section all you have to do is leave a short review saying how much you liked or hated the chapter.
!Warning: I just realized how much bashing is going to happen in this story (quite a bit) so if that not your thing this is your warning, and if you really like Sakura you I don't so she gets bashed
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Does anybody have any good Dark Naruto story suggestions. I have like two stories that have a Naruto who is dark evil and well written (by Alban55 and Darthemius great authors check out their stories), but other than those any dark Naruto stories I might find either A) haven't been updated in about a year or B) have Naruto become the hero again. so if you have any suggestions leave me a review or send me a PM
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Guest- I don't think so and if she does it won't affect Naruto in any way
Guest- the Schizophrenia might just be the fact that I am not in same state of mind I was in when I started writing this story so my intentions have changed
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Okay I have had a few people ask/complain about my devil clones and I just thought I would explain the minimal reasoning I had when I made them
Reason 1: I just thought of them and decided to include them into my story
Reason 2: I wanted to have a way for the Kyuubi to have an actual influence outside of the seal without having been freed by Naruto or having his power stripped from him, so I thought since when ever Naruto used the Kyuubi's chakra he was tainted by it and allowed the Kyuubi some control, and since the Bijuu are sentient masses of chakra Kyuubi can control his chakra. I figured that that would also transfer over to the clones as well, cuz the more of Kyuubi's chakra Naruto used the more tainted he became so the same thing happens with the clones the more of kyuubi's chakra Naruto uses to make the clones the more control the Kyuubis has over them.
Reason 3: Limiting the power of the Shadow clone jutsu. From what I was able to understand a shadow clone will dispell from a moderate application of force, so it would stand to reason that even if a shadow clone punches something else the force felt upon contact with will dispel the shadow clone as well. In other words if shadow clones hit/get hit with the force of anything stronger than a painful high five they will dispel (I do not claim to be an expert I stopped watching Naruto years ago, most of my knowledge comes from other fanfics so don't read this story for accuracy)
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Hey everybody I am asking your help in making this story better by when leaving a review if you could follow this format. I am just trying to improve my writing style and I need your help to tell me what I am doing right and what I am doing wrong.
1. write a sentence about something that was done well or a part of the story you enjoyed the most
2. write a sentence about something that was done poorly or something that confused, annoyed, disappointed you, ECT.
3. Write any suggestions you have for the story, I am sort of making it up as I go.
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Previously in Chapter 4
Naruto was attacked by a abnormally large tiger while training in the forest of death and in his panic he tapped into the Kyuubi's chakra while he was doing the shadow clone jutsu. The end result was a brand new clone the Devil Clones which fought and killed the tiger. The clone then transported the tiger into the seal, and knocked Naruto out sending him into the seal as well. There Naruto discovers that the clones have a form of telepathy and meets the Kyuubi for the first time. Being deemed to weak the Kyuubi sends him away implying that if Naruto gets stronger he will attain immense power. Waking up in the forest of death Naruto returned to his apartment finding it destroyed. Luckily his secret closet compartment was not found leaving his important belongings safe, but causing Naruto to reconsider his apartment as a safe place to keep them.
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Chapter 5: Back To School
Page Length: 7
Word count:3410
Character count:18909
Writting/Edit Time:274:40:55
"Ruskibraat" human talking (Regular shadow clone speech is also written this way)
'Ruskibraat' human thinking
"Ruskibraat" Black Devil clones
#####Point of view change#####
-Time Skip-
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Final Paragraph of Chapter 4
Naruto stood in his destroyed room thinking 'what if...' Naruto thought 'what if I make the seals out of something other than regular ink?' Racking his memory Naruto vaguely remembered the beginner book of seals had mentioned that in the future there were seals that required blood and charka to be added to a seal making it only respond to a certain person and that there were ways to put these seals onto anything, but the book didn't really go into detail about it. Though it did mention that combining the precise amount of blood and chakra into special ink made it so that any seals made with this ink would be extremely durable and long lasting. Shrugging Naruto decided to go and find a more advanced book of seals later but for now he unsealed a spare set of clothes and went to go take a shower deciding to just carry the scrolls with him for now.
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The Next Morning
Naruto was walking towards the academy practicing some of his more subtle smoke manipulation, with varying degrees of success, by the time Naruto arrived at the academy he could create a very small but thick cloud of smoke without any immediately noticeable use of chakra. Entering the academy Naruto completely ignored the secretary screeching about smoking not being allowed and went straight to room 201 and knocked. A few minuets later the door was opened by the teacher.
"Yes, how can I-" Iruka Umino started to ask before noticing who was at his door "What do you want boy?" he said with a slight sneer
Naruto ignored him and just tried walking into the classroom, but Iruka blocked the door way
Naruto took a deep drag on his cigarette then stared up at Iruka, and with a tiny bit of chakra he blew a huge cloud of smoke into Iruka's face making him double over and start coughing. Naruto brushed past him and tossed the scroll the Hokage had given him a week ago at the slowly recovering Iruka who clumsily caught it.
With a glare at Naruto Iruka started to read the scroll, when he finished he shot a hateful glare at Naruto who he saw had already taken a seat at the back of the class. Composing himself Iruka walked to the front of the room.
"Okay students we have another student joining us this year, he failed his graduation exam for the second time, so the Hokage has decided that he needs to take it again" he said with a smirk gesturing towards Naruto "Naruto Uzumaki"
Iruka along with everybody else in the room turned to look at Naruto, but instead of finding an enraged or ashamed kid they all just saw Naruto blowing smoke rings not even paying attention.
Turning red from the fact that his plot to embarrass Naruto failed Iruka continued with the roll call
"Sasuke Uchiha"
"Hnn"
"Shino Aburme"
"Here"
"Natsuki Nam...Namikaze!"
All the students except for Naruto gasped in shock, Naruto glanced over and Narrowed his eyes in anger before going back to his smoke rings (they were really fun and relaxing to watch)
"Hehe hello everyone its nice to meet all of you" Natsuki said rubbing the back of her head
'Hey, that's the boy that Toa-san and Kaa-san said to be friends with' Natsuki thought looking at Naruto 'why should I be friends with such a loser? he's failed TWICE already!' she huffed
Naruto meanwhile had finished his first cigarette and was on his second one trying to drown out Iruka's voice as he kept going down the attendance list choosing to instead think more on his problem of where to keep his things. Over the last two years of learning the materiel Naruto could oddly recall the sections that were spent reviewing seals with remarkable clarity. Going over what the textbooks said and what they had learned in class about seals Naruto realized that the time spent on seals was abysmally small. The textbook only said that a seal master was capable of creating powerful seals and had a small list of the most common seals used by ninja such as the storage seal and exploding seal shrugging Naruto realized there was nothing he could do about it now and settled back into his seat staring out the window ignoring the rest of the class.
About half way through class Naruto felt the beginnings of a massive migraine for a second before it disappeared, shaking his head Naruto suddenly felt as though he remembered something, he remembered everything his clones had done in the forest. Naruto could remember how the group of clones he had left in the forest had finished working on the Transformation Jutsu to the point where he could make it work by just saying the name, then after that he remembered how they joined the group practicing the replacement Jutsu in order to speed up the process after working on that for a while the clone had run out of chakra and dispelled.
Having been preoccupied by going through his clones memory Naruto had failed to notice that it was lunch time and almost all the students had left leaving only a few in the classroom; Himself, Shino, Sasuke, Shikamaru, and Natsuki who was standing right in front of him.
"Hey loser how come your still trying to be a ninja you've failed twice just give up" Natsuki said to him hoping to get a reaction, sadly she was disappointed because Naruto could care less what anybody else though
Naruto stood slowly and looked at her boardly "You're a Namikaze right?"
Natsuki nodded a smirk growing on her face everybody always was awed that she was the daughter of the 4th Hokage
Naruto smiled calmly at her "I hate the Namikaze family" he said before turning away and walking towards the door
Natsuki stood there stunned nobody had ever said to her before, unfreezing Natsuki ran after him and pulled his shoulder making him face her
"Who do you think you are, saying you hate my family were the greatest people ever, and you're just a no name orphan, I'm practically royalty here I demand an apology" she said red faced practically screaming at Naruto
Naruto looked at her with another smile and said "fuck you" before walking out the door
Natsuki froze again this time from Naruto's use of strong vocabulary and she mechanically went and took her seat sitting quietly until lunch ended
-Time skip end of lunch-
Naruto had come back into class and took his seat in the back corner of the room ignoring everybody else and pulled out a book on seals that he went to get from the library it was basic, but it was a start. Naruto was reading his book when a shadow fell over him, Naruto just ignored the person and kept reading. Apparently the person didn't like being ignored because they started tapping their foot in irritation, just as Naruto was about to ask the person what they wanted him along with the rest of the class had to cover their ears when the most horrible sounding voice screeched out
"HEY YOU BAKA WHY ARE YOU TRYING TO LOOK COOLER THAN SASUKE-KUN"
it was terrible, it sounded like dragging nails across a blackboard, inside a parking garage, while having a hangover and migraine at the same time. Looking up Naruto saw the strangest creature standing in front of him it had the biggest forehead he had ever seen that reflected sunlight to blind people and it also had bright pink hair.
'How the heck does that even happen, seriously what do you have to do to be born with that color hair' Naruto thought looking at the thing
"Geez Sakura why do you have to yell?" Kiba whined holding his hands over his ears "Use your indoor voice"
"SHUT UP YOU BAKA I'M NOT TALKING TO YOU" the creature now identified as a Sakura screeched out before turning back to Naruto
Naruto smirked as he saw Kiba squirm on the ground holding his ears
"ANSWER ME YOU BAKA" the Sakura screeched
Now Naruto was getting pissed, why wouldn't people leave him alone why did they think he sat in the corner and ignored in the first place. Seriously first the Namikaze bitch and now this pink thing, why couldn't people just leave him alone.
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Finally the new kid was paying attention, how dare he ignore her and try to be cooler than her Sasuke-kun
'I'll teach him a lesson no one is better than my Sasuke-kun' she thought to her self
Since she was an insecure delusional retard her brain needed something to talk to and be friends with, but since no one else, be they people or animal was willing it created a twisted persona in her mind just to agree with itself since no one else would.
"I THINK YOUR JUST TRYING TO LOOK COOL" I said to him getting pretty annoyed with him ignoring me
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Everyone felt bad for the new guy, hell even Sasuke felt sympathy for Naruto having to deal with Sakura up close
'This thing is beginning to get on my nerves' Naruto thought
At first he had hoped the Sakura would go away, but it just stood there yelling at him and he had had enough as he stood up the Sakura started yelling at him again and he couldn't take it anymore
"!Smack!"
Naruto unleashed a wicked backhand at the thing, in fact it had so much force that it picked up the creature and launched it over the row of desks behind it causing it to land on the Inuzuka who squirmed at coming into contact with such a vile thing, After enjoying Kiba's misery for a few seconds Naruto looked around, everyone was staring at him, Naruto shrugged there was nothing he could do about that
(Naruto Doesn't Hate Kiba More Than The Others, I Just Thought He Would Be Most Affected By Sakura's Voice)
"What?"Naruto asked in a matter of fact tone
"It wouldn't shut up" he said when the rest of the class kept staring
No one knew how to respond to that, so everybody just sat quiet;y not wanting to be the next ones to get backhanded
After about five minuets Iruka finally returned and was surprised by how quiet the class was, he was so surprised he didn't even notice that Sakura was not in her seat; Instead she was shoved under her desk by Kiba after he got her off of him, deciding to use the silence Iruka continued his lesson. After a boring lecture about the first and second Hokage's favorite foods and colors they had a pop quiz which Naruto didn't' even bother filling out instead he mindlessly practiced one of the low level water seals on the back of the test and after writing 'do not use' on it he turned in the test when the time ran out.
-Time-Skip Two hours later-
All the students had left and Iruka was sitting behind his desk grading the pop quiz he had given the class, he was almost done and was on the last test. Looking at the name Iruka saw that it was Naruto's. Narrowing his eyes he looked at the quiz before realizing it was blank and smiled
"well, I was going to fail the demon brat anyway, but he did that for me" Iruka said to himself stretching as he stood up accidentally sending Naruto's quiz to the floor where it landed upside down. Glancing at it Iruka was just going to leave it there until something caught his eye. Looking closer at the test he saw it was some kind of seal on the back with 'DO NOT USE' written on it in bold letters, scoffing Iruka picked it up
'What can the demon brat know about seals he's not even a genin' Iruka thought as he channeled some chakra into the seal
SCENE CHANGE: school hallways
Yagi Osaka was about to leave the school when he decided to go for a drink. Not wanting to go alone, he was going to see if Iruka wanted to join him. Yagi smiled as he walked towards Iruka's room 201 they served on the same genin team together and pulled some pretty fun pranks back in the day. Shaking his head slightly Yagi let out a small chuckle as he neared room 201. Just as Yagi was about to open the door he heard a loud noise
WOOOSHHHH
And then Iruka yelling out before being washed through the door by a flood of water slamming him into the hallway wall. Leaning around the corner of the door frame Yagi saw that there was some paper that was pumping a ton of water out of itself lying on top of Iruka's desk ruining all the other papers. Eying the damage Yagi glanced back at Iruka who had picked himself off the floor and looked dazed for a minuets before regaining his senses
"DAME THAT DEMON BRAT, THAT BASTARD WONT GET AWAY WITH THIS" Iruka yelled "THE HOKAGE WILL MAKE HIM PAY FOR THIS" He yelled as he stomped off towards the Hokage's tower
SCENE CHANHGE: Hokage tower
Minato was leaning back in the Hokage's chair relaxing, he had about five more minuets before someone somewhere decided to send him some more paper work. Minato was just starting to enjoy his small break when Iruka burst in soaking wet
"HOKAGE-SAMA! you need to punish the demon he's flooded my classroom!" Iruka yelled and began telling the Hokage and extremely falsified tale of how Naruto had come in after school and set up some sort of elaborate trap to destroy the classroom for some reason or another.
Minato's eyes narrowed, Naruto flood the school? Rubbing his chin in thought Minato thought it was possible, Naruto had been pretty upset about being sent back to the academy and was angry with Minato himself. It was entirely possible that Naruto would to this, and add the fact that Minato found out that he pulled pranks quite often, along with Iruka's story it was looking very convincing. This would require serious action Minato couldn't allow Naruto to get away with doing such things even if he was his son, especially since Naruto was his son.
"Anbu" he called out
A shadow melted from the wall and knelt in front of Minato's desk
"Go bring me Naruto Uzumaki" he ordered the Anbu and dismissed him with a wave of his hand
"yes Lord Hikae" the Anbu acknowledged the command and Body Flickered away
Minato settled back to complete the paperwork that had appeared on his desk while he waited