The rewrite of this story has been posted.
Rewriting Fiction:
Sometimes, extraordinary things happen to ordinary people. It used to be that Kai Dallas' biggest concerns were gymnastics, making Top Ten, and her cheating boyfriend. Suddenly, she finds herself caught up in Red Stones and grey Gates and gold-eyed alchemists, and... well, with extraordinary things come extraordinary sacrifices.
This story is written with the same characters with the same concept as to the relationship between Amestris and our world. The 'endgame plot,' which I never got to in either Truth & Fiction or The Unseen World, remains the same. However, the actions taken which lead them to these events are entirely different ... different enough that while it's the same story, it's not the same story at all.
Karmyn is more relatable, and receives more character development.
Kathy plays a much larger, much more involved role.
Karmyn ends up in Amestris for a much more realistic reason than a wallet.
Getting ripped away from her family and home affects Karmyn much more than in this story.
The relationship between Alphonse and Karmyn comes much more naturally (aka it actually happens).
I know I am the author and therefore biased, but while I am usually extremely critical of my writing, I reread these chapters to edit them and think, yes. Yes, this is good. So if you've finished this and want more ... go check it out.
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