This is my first story, so please some creative criticism would be nice. Thanks!!
Summary: Max is thinking about her feelings toward a certain birdkid and doesn't know what to do. But something happens and now she couldn't be more embarrased. The voice doesn't exist in here. And lyrics in Italics after time change.
Disclaimer: For reasons unknown, I do NOT own Maximum Ride, Fang, Nudge, Iggy, Gazzy or Angel!!!! I know, a major gasp moment. I didn't see it coming either. And due to this sudden bomb I will now go sulk in a corner while eating 4 gallons of ice cream.
(comes back with ice cream spoon in mouth and tears) On with the story!!!!!!!!
"JEEEEEEBBBBBB!!!!!" Max yelled, searching frantically for the reformed whitecoat. She found him in his room, reading a gigantic book on his bed. The former whitecoat looked at the 9 year old, and wondered what could have possibly happened.
Max ran inside and shut the door and catapulted onto the master bed. She immediately scrambled over and sat next to her caretaker, who was looking at her rather inquisitively. She whispered, "I'm confused, Jeb. I don't know what to do." He looked at her in surprise and asked ,"Do about what?"
She paused and thought about what she was about to tell: her now deepest and darkest secret would be revealed and she would never be able to live it down. He would laugh and then tell everyone including the person it was about, embarrassing her beyond belief.
Max made a split second decision. "Nothing. Never mind. You can't help. I'm in too deep already." She climbed off of the bed and sulkily exited the room, with Jeb staring after her and wondering "What the heck just happened?"
Max went to her room, and groaned into her pillow. 'Why me? What happened to change my feelings? God, WHY IS THIS SO CONFUSING?!?!?!'
-CUE THE TIME SCENE CHANGE!!!-
Another hotel. I have no idea how many we have been to in the past two months, but I think it went over at least the 60 mark. Jeez, aren't we living fancy?
We got to the front desk and paired up the way that it usually did: Nudge and Angel and Total, Iggy and Gazzy, and Fang and me. We never plan this. At least I never do. But I think that Nudge and Angel kept pointing at me and whispering. Whenever that happens, that is not a good sign.
I opened the door after making sure the others were settled and headed straight for the shower. As the water poured down on my skin, I let out a huge sigh. 'Sweet relief'. The hot water poured over me and washed all the dirt, or alt least most of it, down the drain.
After the most luxurious shower ever, I got my pajamas on and walked out of the bathroom. Fang was sitting on the bed, probably updating his blog. Yes he still does it, and sometimes Nudge, Iggy, and I all post messages too. So now it's our blog. But right now I needed music and the laptop. So I went over and said to him, "Bathroom's free. Your turn."
He got up from off the bed and put down the laptop. "The kids went to bed, and yes you can use the laptop." How the HELL he could read me so well, I still have no idea. But I didn't have time to ask him, seeing as he had already disappeared into the bathroom. Oh well, at least the laptop is free.
I grabbed Fang's prized possession and switched the page to ITunes. Then I opened another page to my MySpace. (Yes I found it nice to write some of my thoughts down there too.) I wrote down my thoughts for the day, and what I was thinking about now. How I felt about a certain bird boy (coughFangcough), but always using a fake name.
Yeah, I know what you're thinking. "I knew it!!! She fell in love with him and she finally came out of denial!!! Valerie you owe me ten bucks!" (A.N O.K. maybe not that last part, but Valerie does owe me 10 bucks. But anyways….)And for once, I will not argue. Yes I have admitted it to myself, but I am not happy. More like angry at myself, and confuzzled (A.N.: My word!!! No stealing!!!)
More songs came out of the computer, and I subconsciously came sang along, not at all noticing that Fang had long come out of the bathroom and was staring at me on the bed.
A random song I didn't even know I knew came on, and I surprised myself by singing along. Love story by Katherine McPhee. The funny thing was that it fit my situation perfectly.
It's a typical love story
We started out as friends
We met way back when
This is just a
Typical love story
The boy you never wanted
Just steals your heart
I never saw it comin'
Till I fell so hard
My immediate thought was "Wow…". I took the headphones out of the computer and let it play out loud. I got up and started to dance along. Then came the next verse:
I always made up some excuse
Sayin' that you weren't my type
Didn't wanna face the truth
Didn't wanna cross that line
Till one day I saw you
Out of the corner of my eye
You were flirting with some girl
And I said I thought I would die
Did I ever mention how much I was jealous, which I had identified the feeling in the pit of my stomach as, after I saw Fang kissing Lissa? I felt like my heart had just caught on fire, and was being stomped on and shredded in half. I kept singing and dancing. Next verse!!!
Can't believe it's happening
When I least expect it
My prince under disguise
How you fooled me with those eyes
When I feel like letting go
In your arms is where I know
I am (don't know what she says there)
From the beginning
We always belong
Love Love Story Love
Love Story Love
Love Story Love
Love Story Love
Love Story Love
(This is my)
Love Story Love
(This is my Love Story)
Love Story love
Love Story Love
This is my Love Story
My Gosh! I swear, Katherine McPhee could have written this song for me. As it drowned out and I stopped singing, I grabbed my Ipod, pulled on a pair of sweats and a jacket, and took off from the window. At this point, it was one of the softer songs: "Hate that I love you" by Ne-yo and Rihanna. And the words to this song were just as right as the other one. I sang loud and clear, though I doubt I sang well, and eventually landed in the forest outside of town. Fang had, unknown to me, followed and was currently sitting camouflaged into a few branches about 3 feet from me. Had it not been for his emotastic clothing, I may have seen him and prevented myself from saying what I did next.
I groaned, and remembered my situation with Fang. "Why the hell did I have to fall in love with the most off limits guy in the world? Cupid must really hate me." As an afterthought I added, "Because of all the boys on the planet, I had to fall in love with Fang! Just had to!" By the end of my little rant, I was yelling at the sky, and what I thought was no one.
Please REVIEW!!! I need at least 15 please to finish the story. I have it all written down.
Sincerely,
"Ooh what does this button do?"
"No, Zach, don't touch it!!! You will blow up some part of the Earth!!!!Don't-"
BOOM!!!!!!
"Hey Zee, where'd Canada go?"
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