I am trying my hand at poetry again. I know that it probably sucks, but what else can I do? Even if you don't like it, I will still be happy that I tried this.
Searching through the darkness,
Blood covered hands guide my way.
Dead in more ways than one,
I walk the gates of time.
Never sleeping,
Never waking,
Never dreaming.
Never feeling happiness,
No world of hate,
Just sorrow in the soul.
I am darkness,
I am death,
I am rebirth.
A never-ending cycle in the universe,
Never ending,
Never beginning in a dark world.
Am I never meant to have happiness?
Am I to live when no one else does?
This world is just pain,
Just sorrow.
If only I could feel the wonders of the world,
The happiness that lies there.
If only I could feel this one feeling,
Not in your world,
But in mine.
Am I a pawn for Destiny,
For Fate and Chance?
Always there,
Yet never there at all.
Why must I bare this power,
This pain,
This life and the next?
If only I could end it.
Stop my suffering,
And let it be the beginning of yours.
I will always live this lie,
Yet never live it at all…
Please review this poem. I have written one other poem, but I think that this one is better. Even if you don't like it, I still would like a review. Last but not least, will someone please give me some tips on poetry!