Ok this is my first fic so please send me any criticism that could help me, and i know the chappie is pretty short but im hopin to make them longer. thanks.

Somewhere someone was screaming as he watched him fall through the veil in slow motion with a look of shock plastered onto his face...

Harry woke up sweating. It was still the same dream he had been having since Sirius had died. Sometimes he wished that the occasional dream about Cedric would permeate the horror of watching his godfather and one of his fathers last friends die.
He had been back at the Dursleys for a few weeks and had been spending most days out of the house. He'd been going to the local shopping mall looking around the shops especially the music shops. He loved the rock section, and he spent a lot of time in the gothic clothes shop where he brought dark clothes, large shoes, and dark make-up.
The Dursleys were even more scared of him now partly thanks to Moody's threats but they were so scared of his new look, not to mention that now he was at least 5 inches taller than Vernon.
Harry just loved to piss them off by playing music by bands like Linkin Park, Evanesence, H.I.M, Korn and especially Slipknot.
He loved the rock music because so many lyrics in the songs seemed to fit in very well with his life.
He had been getting owls from his friends, Ron and Hermione, but he was disappointed with the fact that he couldn't go to the Burrow this year because it wasn't safe and he didn't want to go to Grimmauld Place because it reminded him of Sirius.
He got up from his bed and went to the floor length mirror on his wardrobe. He had raven black hair, brilliant emerald green eyes, and the scar that had made his life hell thanks to that bastard Voldermort who had killed his parents.
There was a loud bang on the door, and a booming voice "Boy! Shut up before you wake up the entire street!"
"Yes Uncle," he yelled back. He heard his uncle storm back into his own room, then looked at his clock. 3:42, 'damn' he thought 'I really need to get back to sleep.'
He laid down on his bed and fell asleep hoping not to dream again. His last thoughts before he fell asleep was of his friends, hoping they were having a better summer than him.

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