Sometimes a story leaves stuff to be desired.
"Tricked" was such a contender for me and if you want to know my gripes please continue to read.
Enjoy and have a good time!
Lucy shook her head at her older sister, Luan Loud. "I see how it fits you, but I'm trying to be more original here, not copying the masters."
Luan was dressed in a black coat with the inside garment being crimson. Her ventriloquist dummy, Mister Coconuts, was accordingly dressed in a black suit with a red tie and black shoes. His face was now pale-white with red spirals on his checks.
"But Lucy, I bet you SAW that coming with me," Luan explained and laughed. "Get it?"
Lucy sighed in annoyance.
How "Tricked" should have ended
by
Hatoralo
Scene 1: Just curb stomp their buttocks!
Hank and Hawk were walking down the street, leaving behind a lot of chaos and crying children.
Feeling safe from any form of repercussion, they were surprised when they heard a loud "HEY! Give us back our candy!" behind them.
Turning to the source of the noise, the two overgrown boys found themselves face-to-face with three kids and a baby.
"To make it short you two Neanderthals," the one dressed as a kangaroo with the baby in her pooch began. "You will give us regive our confectionery, or we will stimulate your nerve endings with severe pain that you may not recuperate from."
"I didn't get half of that, but if you think you can do us any harm, then I am a streetcar," Hank sneered and laughed in a dumb manner.
"Not an eloquent sarcastic response," analyzed Lisa without moving a muscle. "How can we get you to give us our sweets back before our sisters who sneaked up behind you have to beat you senseless?"
"Oh, what a cute trick," Hawk figured in a mocking tone. "That is the oldest trick in the world. Do you little twerps really think we would fall for that?"
"Actually, no. This is I why I am here."
Hank & Hawk, startled from the young Goth who had appeared between them, jumping to the sides.
"Oh, you are still conscious," observed Lucy in a tranquil way. "So much for the elegant sneak attack."
Hank & Hawk, still startled but not too much to let themselves be easily intimidated, positioned themselves to look as imposing as they could before Lucy.
"Ahaha! Is that all?" laughed and mocked Hank, pointing at the little goth in the Grim Reaper outfit with a fitting scythe.
"You look like a monk who fell into a tub of tar!" mocked Hawk further.
"That is surprisingly blunt to the point," Lucy admitted. "So, we will also get to the point now."
Somebody tapped on the shoulders of Hank & Hawk, and as they turned to the source of the tapping, they found themselves confronted by 5 angry looking older girls in Halloween costumes. From largest to smallest: A vampire, a headless Queen Marie Antoinette, a Skeleton, a mad scientist and Jason Voorhees.
"You remember the plan?" asked the smallest of the five older girls.
"We let you do this alone until we think you need help or you need to stop."
"Correct," said Lynn, cracking her neck. "Bang-Bang. Full in the face!"
And before the two could react, Lynn's fists flew straight to the faces of Hank & Hawk.
"Get your candy back, get your candy back!" shouted Leni, handing out the stolen candy back to the children the two overgrown bullies had stolen from.
Said bullies were indisposed by a lot of bandages around their bodies, lying on the ground and groaning.
"It was good of you to confront those bullies and give the candy back to everyone," praised Rita her daughters. "But did you have to break all the bones in their bodies?"
"They are salubrious," explained Lisa. "After my sport obsessed sister took their conscious, we bound them in their own toilet paper."
"Best. Halloween. Ever!" exclaimed Lola who was bathing in the praise of the entire neighborhood, along with her sisters.
Fast Forward to another scene…
To be continued.
"Tricked" was a good episode but Hank & Hawk absolutely SUCKED as villains. Who came up with those guys?
Anyway: This will not be the last example of how "Tricked" should have ended.
Stay tuned for next time!