So in honor of KINGDOM OF ASHES RELEASE (THE LAST TOG BOOK SAVE OUR SOULS) I finally got off my ass and did a rewrite (its 100% different don't worry I didn't just reword it) of the excerpts SJM put out like two months ago, please enjoy!
Original "The Princess" (Written by Sarah J. Maas):
The iron smothered her. It had snuffed out the fire in her veins, as surely as if the flames had been doused.
She could hear the water, even in the iron box, even with the iron mask and chains adorning her like ribbons of silk. The roaring; the endless rushing of water over stone. It filled the gaps between her screaming.
A sliver of island in the heart of a mist-veiled river, little more than a smooth slab of rock amid the rapids and falls. That's where they'd put her. Stored her. In a stone temple built for some forgotten god.
As she would likely be forgotten. It was better than the alternative: to be remembered for her utter failure. If there would be anyone left to remember her. If there would be anyone left at all.
She would not allow it. That failure.
She would not tell them what they wished to know.
No matter how often her screams drowned out the raging river. No matter how often the snap of her bones cleaved through the bellowing rapids.
She had tried to keep track of the days.
But she did not know how long they had kept her in that iron box. How long they had forced her to sleep, lulled into oblivion by the sweet smoke they'd poured in while they traveled here. To this island, this temple of pain.
She did not know how long the gaps lasted between her screaming and waking. Between the pain ending and starting anew.
Days, months, years - they bled together, as her own blood often slithered over the stone floor and into the river itself.
A princess who was to live for a thousand years. Longer.
That had been her gift. It was now her curse.
Another curse to bear, as heavy as the one placed upon her long before her birth. To sacrifice her very self to right an ancient wrong. To pay another's debt to the gods who had found their world, become trapped in it. And then ruled it.
She did not feel the warm hand of the goddess who had blessed and damned her with such terrible power. She wondered if that goddess of light and flame even cared that she now lay trapped within the iron box - or if the immortal had transferred her attentions to another. To the king who might offer himself in her stead and in yielding his life, spare their world.
The gods did not care who paid the debt. So she knew they would not come for her, save her. So she did not bother praying to them.
But she still told herself the story, still sometimes imagined that the river sang it to her. That the darkness living within the sealed coffin sang it to her as well.
Once upon a time, in a land long since burned to ash, there lived a young princess who loved her kingdom...
Down she would drift, deep into that darkness, into the sea of flame. Down so deep that when the whip cracked, when bone sundered, she sometimes did not feel it.
Most times she did.
It was during those infinite hours that she would fix her stare on her companion.
Not the queen's hunter, who could draw out pain like a musician coaxing a melody from an instrument. But the massive white wolf, chained by invisible bonds. Forced to witness this.
There were some days when she could not stand to look at the wolf. When she had come so close, too close, to breaking. And only the story had kept her from doing so.
Once upon a time, in a land long since burned to ash, there lived a young princess who loved her kingdom...
Words she had spoken to a prince. Once - long ago.
A prince of ice and wind. A prince who had been hers, and she his. Long before the bond between their souls became known to them.
It was upon him that the task of protecting that once-glorious kingdom now fell.
The prince whose scent was kissed with pine and snow, the scent of that kingdom she had loved with her heart of wildfire.
Even when the dark queen presided over the hunter's ministrations, the princess thought of him. Held on to his memory as if it were a rock in the raging river.
The dark queen with a spider's smile tried to wield it against her. In the obsidian webs she wove, the illusions and dreams she spun at the culmination of each breaking point, the queen tried to twist the memory of him as a key into her mind.
They were blurring. The lies and truths and memories. Sleep and the blackness in the iron coffin. The days bound to the stone altar in the center of the room, or hanging from a hook in the ceiling, or strung up between chains anchored into the stone wall. It was all beginning to blur, like ink in water.
So she told herself the story. The darkness and the flame deep within her whispered it, too, and she sang it back to them. Locked in that coffin hidden on an island within the heart of a river, the princess recited the story, over and over, and let them unleash an eternity of pain upon her body.
Once upon a time, in a land long since burned to ash, there lived a young princess who loved her kingdom...
My Rewritten "The Princess":
Her breathing had never recovered from the first whipping, she always felt on the brink of suffocation.
She had never felt the weightlessness of her nineteen years like now.
She was a child.
She wanted her mother, her father- to cry and to collapse on, to solve her shit stain of a life.
The need was a black hole lodged in her throat that she could not swallow.
It brought her to her knees, or as close as she could get in her coffin. She had been curled there long enough for her thighs, arms, and torn back, to fuse to the iron. Once they'd rip her from it, she'd shed another layer of molten bubbling skin on the walls. But in times like this, when they had shattered and slashed each inch of her so she could not rest her head in her hands and she could not stand the iron on her scalp, those fried, sickly sweet, hunks were her only resting place.
They crumpled against her back, plastered to her eye, and greased and mushed around her bare ass.
As her mouth watered, saliva dribbling down her limp throat, her teeth trembled with the lust to rip her arteries from her wrists. She could hear them pulsing, imagine the blue branches beneath her palm, taste her blood, feel its warmth gush under her tongue and into her swollen windpipe as her organs and skin would finally suffocate with her soul.
Her whine morphed into a whimper when she shut her jaw.
She was a coward.
They had been right.
They were still right and they always would be.
She hadn't grown past it, she had just become proud enough not to act on it.
But now her dignity had been stripped, cut, whipped, shat, and fucked from her and all she wanted to do was die. She should have ran the second she took her first step, the second Abroynn blinked, the second Dorian unlocked her cuffs… the second she had seen Rowan in that alley.
No love was worth this.
Every time they came and dissected her, he would stoop down- fish breath and scruff scraping against her cheek- offering to cut too deep or stitch her up if she would only obey; yet when she would draw a breath, her lips contorting into the first syllable, a heated, powerful hand would choke her from within till her answers sounded like a pig's screams.
Fuck the gods.
Fuck her bloodline.
She hated the name the dark queen purred, the white wolf whimpered, and the Prince woven into her nightmares breathed.
Aelin.
Aelin.
Aelin.
She detested it. The "A" whined and the "lin" cut off as if her parents had died before they could finish naming her.
Another mask, the woman the gods wanted her, the girl, to be. Maybe if they had granted her the freedom and comfort to find herself she would have become her, but they tried to cheat and shortcut and all it had taken was some bloodletting and skin shedding to reset her.
She was not Celeana. She was not Aelin. Both facades, both sheep in wolf clothing.
And she didn't want to be either, she didn't want to be chained to a master or to a crown. She was no Assassin and no Queen.
She was a human. And she deserved to be free for once in her life-
Something whined.
Something metal.
In an instant, her humanity was decimated so animal survival instincts could reign.
Someone was coming.
She could already feel the pricks of knives. Her heart ran so fast it would surely trip and collapse.
A foot above her head, the bolt being slid back rattled the entire coffin.
He was here.
The door inched ajar- It's him. Cairn rips it open so he can see her fall onto the stone nude and sobbing.
She shuddered, gasped in relief, and slumped back to hide her face in the globs of flesh
She couldn't see the light that flooded in anymore, but she could feel its force and his as he knelt down.
A clammy hand fluttered above her shoulder and a honey voice with honey hair and molasses eyes murmured, "Remember what you told me, once upon a time, in a land long since burned to ash, there lived a young princess who loved her kingdom…"
She would have laughed.
Instead, she turned, letting him see the milky, crusted eyes, the swollen lump where her cheek bone was crushed. Her lips parted as she coughed. Blood spluttered out, down her chin and onto her breast.
The young princess just hoped at least one drop had found its mark on his perfect puppy dog face.
Go to the previous chapter to read the rewrite of "The Prince"!
So what are your predictions for KOA? NO SPOILERS.
I'm predicting a fake sad ending that ends up being happy (Like ACOWAR maybe with a bit more sacrifice)... but TBH I want Aelin to die.
Thoughts?