Hello everyone who has taken the time to read this story. Thank you for taking time out of your days to read what I wrote. I wrote this story about a year ago to use in a Dungeons and Dragons campaign I ran. I wanted to bring the world of Freezing into DnD and created a world and story around the characters from Freezing. This of course meant changing many of their mannerisms, attitudes, personalities, etc. I used this story as the plot and had the players live through the encounters the story had.

I decided I would start posting the chapters on Fanfiction for fun. I have never posted any of my work anywhere. Mostly because I am overly critical of my writing. That being said after reading the story I wrote I realized many issues with it that I was upset with. Of course this was long after I had already written it and the thought of rewriting and editing made me a very sad panda.

Firstly, the pacing of the story did not read smoothly. A lot of parts felt rushed or details not fleshed out properly. I struggle the most with pacing of a story. I worry that things are stagnant and boring, but during exciting pieces they seem to pass by far too quickly. This is my biggest challenge and hurdle I hope to overcome as this story continues.

Secondly, character development is another issue. Reading the story as I posted these chapters I came to realize that a lot of characters were not given proper chances to be memorable or important. I failed to make people care about all the characters. Whether it be like or dislike I felt that the story simply read back in a way that would leave readers not even caring what happened to many people. Another thing I hope to change going forward.

The last thing that I found was that much like in Freezing the Limiters are barely recognized or distinguished. This of course is not including Kazuya and my own creation Varen. Aside from them Limiters rarely have much more than a background support role. I hope to bring them up a notch to at least provide better support instead of acting like extras in a movie. I apologize for these glaring issues that may have made the reading difficult at times.

I have already been writing the next part of this story the past few months so I will begin posting those soon. I'm excited to finish another story and read it back and hopefully see drastic changes in the pacing, and characters compared to this one. Hopefully, it provides a small degree of entertainment to more than just myself.

As always thank you again for all the time spent reading. God bless.

-V 6/15/16