So, I've Read The First Chapter, And A Bit Of The Second, And Immediately Encountered One Of My Biggest Pet Peeves: You Don't Always Use Contractions. You Do SOMETIMES But Not Most Of It. Other Than That, A Bit Too Early To Say. On An Unrelated Note, Link's Reasons For Liking Zelda More Than Ilia Seem Kinda Petty And Could Be Phrased Better.

Von Cleef? (laughing harder)

He's alive! HE'S ALIVE!

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

This is super good!

I like IT. BUT JUST awesome is right. Link NOT the type to express NOT even in thought think about IT

lol just finished chptr 25 and i really like it XD my fav chpt though was 21 when ganondorf chased the children XD ima follow and fav the story/writer funniest best story ever XD especially the line were you added excuse me princess XD fav line in zelda cartoon except wasnt as long as links if i remember hom saying it i would laugh like crazy cause he would hold excuse part like excuuuuuuuuuuuse me princess or something like that cause zelda refused to kiss link and the one episode he was about he ate a fly XD

lol second day of reading this i just finished chpt 19 and i like this story allot :D best zelda one i read to bad it will eventually end :(

Hello, my username is Just-AWESOME-old-me (I don't feel like signing in •3•), and I've just started to read your story.

I like the plot, where this story is headed, and especially the long chapters. I don't really care for the writing style though. You don't have to change, but could you please stop having Link cry in every chapter? He's a courageous hero, and he would stand tall, not lay on the ground and weep. Zelda is also brave and smart. She wouldn't yelp for help (unless she really needed it). An example is back when Zelda was in Hyrule Fields. Obviously no one would come to help (Link did, but that's only because of a dream). She wouldn't cry in the grass. She would, I don't know, grab a stick or something, and make her way back to the castle.

Also, LINK SAVED HYRULE! Why wouldn't Zelda trust the savior of her kingdom, AND the beholder of the Triforce of Courage?

You don't have to go back and change anything. I mean, I've only read up to chapter 8. I'm just saying that in future chapters, just imagine Nintendo making a game from your story. Do you really think they would make Link giving up so easily, or Zelda falling for a trap not well put together?

And one more quick thing, THE LINK FROM TWILIGHT PRINCESS IS NOT THE HERO OF TIME! That is getting extremely annoying. The Hero of Time is the Link from Ocarina of Time. Get your facts right.

I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just a little frustrated. I know it's your story, and that if I don't like it, I don't have to read it. I just want you to read this rant, and think about it. I'm just trying to get a fellow writer to become a better writer, that's it.

I am NOT trying to make you feel bad.

Me :p

If he hasn't, then he must retrieve the Master Sword.
Also have you heard of the upcoming Zelda game Hyrule Warriors?

Wow Fado is desperate for setting up the fences...get a life. lol XD just kidding great start!

What will Dom do now? Great chap

What's Zelda's plan? Great chap

I really thought the prince was good, great chap. Is Ilia going to confess her actions ?

Doesn't Link sometimes transform into Wolf form?

Preggers!