Just a few things for you. I loved the story but you should try to find some replacement words for a few things. You should also reread and fix any spelling errors. Defiantly is not Definetly. Not trying to offend you with my criticisms, just want you to improve on your wonderful story. It also felt like I was reading seperate stories, so if you could try to connect chapter one and two together.

Again, your story was very good.

Cheers!

soubi is go to get ristuka's ears soon if ristuka doesn't stop him-but does ristuka want to stop him?

This is really cute. I hope you continue!

Ppoor ristuka!he wants it -but he knows he's so young & a bit afraid