I respect you actually giving Cardin some character development

Juane lol good one

Im interested in carrying on this story I like it a lot really and it would be a pleasure to write this in your name I like what you've done with the story so far you've actually made it really easy for me to write a storyline but I'll hear your ideas first add me on messenger we can talk there if your okay with letting me have a go st this story.
P.S don't you mean passing on the Torchwick. No? Not the right time?

He switches off the safety in his drop pod before it has even left the ship... this seems very stupid on multiple levels.

Also, there is a part which reminds of scene from Princess Bride 'duel of witpoison'.

rip T..T i wish you stayed with it.

Man I gotta tell you I have such a weird love-hate outlook on this story. On one side, ODST was one of my favorite Halo games (no clue why) and the fact that you have incorporated it into RWBY in such a promising and interesting way is super exciting for me. This is, in my opinion, one of the better crossover stories in this section. But at the same time, I feel like there are things that ought to be in this but aren't. Like what exactly did Mickey tell Ozpin about while explaining where they came from? How did Ozpin appear to react? He seems awfully calm and casual about harboring a group of extraterrestrial soldiers with unknown capabilities, weapons and skills in his school. Or what about exactly how crazy and daring did Ruby and Rookie get in their little friendly competition to the point where they completely trashed an entire training room and presumably everything in it? I need these kinds of details, my dude. I can certainly understand that it lengthens the writing process (and as someone who is innately lazy as all hell I totally sympathize), but maybe give it a try. I've found that it always improves the quality of a story, even if that story is already of fairly high quality like this one. Keep up the good work, bro.

Pretty good stuff

Are you still uploading or are you on break

while the chapter was definetly shorter the overall quality of it has improved

Well Romeo's seems to have his act together, and because of that the story seems to have improved a little. Look forward to seeing more.

I'm having a lot of trouble following the timeline here. Yang was at Junior's club in the yellow trailer, which we can assume to be BEFORE beacon. We're currently at the break between the first and second semester. But Yang was at Junior's club, less than a week ago? is this a separate incident or has the timeline been warped here? Also, it's Jaune, not Juane.

I swear to god if there's a ranger named will…
I will lose my shit.

Whatever floats your boat dude.

A GREAT story. My only problem is Romeo, who is every stereotyped black person every, which is nothing like the sarcastic, but still empathetic Romeo i remember from ODST. Other than that, story is great.

Good stuff man keep it fresh and keep it original. Nice way to go.