This was the stupidest excuse for a fanfic that I've ever seen. The plot (if there WAS one) sucked, the structure was crumbly, and the storyline is so worn out it's not even funny.

Go take a writing class, and DO NOT try this again.

Grow up, get a life, and go eat the puke I just upchucked.

Cheerio.

I love your hair. It looks so much better than it did. Oh, but, your belly looks like a basketball.

This story looks so cool so far! I love it! I especially love the way you've written Shinji's character, and how you're giving a little bit of 'screen time' to each character. No one's ignored, which shows the effort on your part. Keep up the great work, and please update soon! _
-Ghost Whisper

WOW THAT WAS GOOD NICE AND EVIL TO KEEP GOING

Well, this a quite a piece of work.

I don't know what you plan to do with these new charkters of yours, but I like your fic very much.

It isn't easy to capture the dark atmosphere of the later episodes of EVA, but you did a pretty damn good job of with.

Keep writing , I wanna know if you can keep this up and what will happen