what? what the hell? why’d you stop only there? this story was getting sweeter and sweeter and what do i find? last updated 2014. urrrrrrgh. frustrating! this story is so good! i’ve never seen the comic but i would think this was a very representation of it. yer writing is succinct and to the point. i just love it. why haven’t you updated in so long? /sob come back and finish this! i’ve been dying to know who the heck Plague was and wtf is the thing Clockwork found/Plague put inhis chest! not to mention Val! and oh! Jazz! will she find her brother? kwan was a really interesting character, too. i don’t see too many of stories adding him.

This was amazing! The plot is very interesting and you seem to just be getting into the good stuff.
The end of the world is coming and there's too many questions left! I'm just dying to know what this think is in Danny's core. Can I throw guesses out there? Could it be something to help start the apocalypse, or is it a seal (like the seals that the horsemen came from. I don't really know much about the 7 seals, so I'm just making stuff up). And what was with the whole ripping of Danny's soul?
This is all so crazy and fantastical and honestly one of the most interesting plot developments I've ever seen!
I thought this was gonna be another fic where Danny's locked up by the GiW and it's just a story of his time there and maybe his eventual rescue/escape. But this was so much more. So much much more.
(I haven't read the comic this based off of, but this is wonderfully done )

You were close with Guy Fawkes, he was 'hanged, drawn and quartered', that meant that after he was hanged until near-death, cut open and his internal organs removed, and then decapitated, and hacked into quarters.

Love the story! Update soon.

I just wanted to say thank you. I just recently found the Asylum Comics by The Alchemist Muse and when I realized it was discontinued I was very disappointed. I searched the internet ravenously for a written continuation and when I found your writings I was so pleased. After reading all 14 Chapters so far, I must say I have high hopes for this series. We all get writer's block, but I do hope you keep with this series! Thank you again for the excellent read.

I felt very sad when it ended the comic, thanks for your fic, i hope more chapters :'3

I only know what two of those terms mean.

Alright, I'm in love with it...

Well, this is very interesting, dark, and insane at the same time :) Perfect. Whoever Plague is working for, and Plague, i really hope they get what they deserve. So, for the 11 years older Danny, what will happen now? Will Jazz find out about Danny going insane, will Valery and Kwan find out about Danny Phantom being Danny Fenton, and will Sam and Tucker be in any future chapters? You dont have to answer any of my questions.

Wow thats some freaky stuff right there. Good writting though. Could use some help of a grammar nazi but all in all not bad. I greatly enjoyed this fanfic and cannot wait for the update. Please do update soon.

This may be explained later ,but I don't honestly understand why this flashback was important. That and it was somewhat confusing. Did phantom planet happen? Is Danny developing schizophrenia from a simple name change? Or does he literally believe that the ectoplasm in his body is turning him more ghost than human? And if he does believe that, why is he still differentiating himself from his phantom form? Shouldn't he just be worried about the ectoplasm taking over his body and making him full ghost? Or is this just a psychotic break because he is afraid of becoming more ghost so he separates himself from phantom? And if he does follow this path of schizophrenia, why doesn't it show up later? Just some questions I thought about. You might answer them later.

Also, why was it always such a bad thing that Danny uses his powers against Dash? And do not give me that shit that Danny could kill him. Powers are just abilities: such as strength, agility, intelligence, etc. Before Danny had his powers, Dash used his superior strength to bully him, and Danny couldn't do anything about it. Dash could of killed him at some point in a fit of anger. Now that he does have the power to stop the bullying, he is supposed to be the boy scout and not do anything about it because... Why? I'm not saying that Danny becomes the bully. I'm just saying that if I had the power to dodge a person's punch or keep him from shoving me into a locker I would use it. And if the argument is that he has to keep his secret identity, it is a stupid one. As long as he didn't use intangibility, invisibility, or Ectoplasmic rays, etc. he wouldn't be found out as Danny phantom. He could say that he trained under his mother, who is a black belt! The notion of halfas does not exist in human society! You're either ghost or human in the eyes of the residents of Amity Park. That is the only opinion of the citizens. He literally started changing back in front of Dash (in micro management) and Dash didn't notice anything. He said to Paulina multiple times that she should really wrap her head around Paulina Fenton, and she didn't connect the dots! His own parents have been close and personal with Danny's phantom form and did not recognize him as their son, despite the many similarities. I feel like I am taking crazy pills! NO ONE IN THE UNIVERSE OF DP WOULD KNOW HE WAS DANNY PHANTOM UNLESS HE CHANGED IN FRONT OF A CAMERA IN FRONT OF MILLIONS OF PEOPLE! If he does it to protect the other students from being bullied, then he can just use his strength to protect them also. This never stopped him before.

The only part that seemed necessary about this chapter was the ending with plague. Also, did you let someone else write this? I had to check several times to make sure that this was the same story under the same author. Didn't seem like your writing. The interactions between people seem different and strained. That may be because you are trying to show Danny's descent into insanity or maybe you're trying to show how he pushed people away, but it doesn't feel like the Danny you have been writing about this whole time. But a lot can change in 14 year in an insane asylum.

Great Job on the other chapters, though. You have captured my attention and I would still like to know what happens.

I really liked this chapter. I know you have been writing your own material for the past few chapters now, and as much as I liked the original comic that was the inspiration for this story, your writing seems much improved now that you've struck out on your own.

The flow of the conversations, the descriptions of the actions, and introspection of Danny's thoughts are much smoother. It make the reader "feel like I'm there" instead of "just watching."

From the beginning, the reader has been wondering how Danny ended up in the awful predicament as a prisoner of the GIW. Now we finally, are getting the background.

Phantom Planet seems to be an issue with many writers and so is often excluded or modified. (It's what I usually do). I'm usually wary about using the "It was only a dream" plot twist but what makes it work is that it seems to have real consequences and causes Danny to question himself and his friends.

The interaction with Sam, Tucker, and Lancer were excellent. The dialogue seemed 'spot on' and captured their personalities and relationship.

I'm also chary of oc's but you have done a masterful job of the new ghost. I realize that new ghostly adversaries are needed but they don't usually fit in nearly as well as yours does.

I eagerly wait for your next installment.

Well whatever plague and is Masters plan is, looks like they're the ones responsible for Danny's
problems and his current vacation from sanity for the last years.

So this is what leads to his capture. One way or another

As for your comment about Sam finding Danny, directly she could do much over family resources, and easy see her
hiring a bunch of mercenaries that would only put bullets in the anyone. If you paid them enough. Heck most were
probably look forward to the option of taking on the guys in white. Special the only rule the engagement was
leave no evidence, back to Sam and rescue hostages everything else is collateral damage

And as for Tucker and all Maslow level of his computer skills. If you a talented amateur or is
he like Tony Stark on vacation

I hope it's all good from here

We shall see

Ooooo flashback chapter, nice. :)

Nice