jeez, this is in Loki's area of behavior. Kind of want to know what happens.

Yes, this is what Loki would do to someone who said, "I love you," to him when they just meet. XD

Okay- I'll be frank here. Your grammar is not the best. You vocabulary is not particularly advanced. Your writing style is slightly bland. But boy you got the characters spot on!

I am very, very impressed with the little thing at the end. I've read a couple things written by authors who have about the same grip as you on grammar and sentence structure before (and yours isn't horrific, but it needs a little bit of reviewing), and generally I get disgusted with the overall oocness of all the characters, but that was really good. I can totally see Elsa realizing she's in love with someone and then feeling awfully hypocritical. Loki's thoughts on the end were so... so *Loki* they could have come straight from the original character.

Don't take my criticism of your short-term writing (grammar, vocabulary, style) as an insult. I just want to let you know what to work on. Definitely, definitely keep writing, because you have an admirable grasp of the characters.

I'm faving this. I only do that with works I'm really, really impressed with.

Oh loki, tsk, why must you mess up fangirls' dreams? *sigh*

cool

i do really love your fiction please continue it moree. I do ship Loki and Elsa I try to find the fiction but I couldn't that so rare.

OKAY thats was rushed rushed rushed! make a solid plot come on! it had potential

I was hoping someone else spotted this potential ship and I am glad you're on the ball in the FanFiction department. Not sure if you intend this to be a solo piece or a chapter-long thing, but glad you wrote this anyway.

Oh, Elsa...you fell under that wizard/god spell. Curse his cool hair and charming smile...his wit...gorgeous eyes that are the color of beautiful...oh Hades, I would fall for it. He's irresistible.

no. this is moving to fast. and dont dont dont make loki a frickin bad guy. come on i expacted more from this. how disappointing

Oh please make it a full story!

Yay i'm not the only person who ships this!

Neat little one-shot. 3