When were the children , dismissed , in this chapter ?

You have some truly excellent ideas and some unique plot twists that I am enjoying. However, your English skills need some strict attention. One cat: cat. More than one cat: cats (NOT cat's). One Potter: Potter. More than one Potter: Potters (NOT Potter's). There are NO apostrophes in pluralizations. This is Primary School English you need to review. Belonging to one Potter: Potter's. Belonging to more than one Potter: Potters' (or Potters's). The possessive requires an apostrophe (with a few exceptions: his, hers, ours and theirs). You miss the apostrophe in the possessive case very often. Ministry’s policy, cat’s paw, night’s sleep, harm’s way... you really need to educate yourself on correct use of the possessive.

You have some unique ideas and I am enjoying your plot progression, but you have some major issues keeping the tense of your writing consistent. You need to pay more attention to your verb tenses; you are mixing past and present tense, occasionally even in the same sentence, and this makes your writing very hard to follow.

Please do not take my constructive criticism as a slight on your storytelling. You have talent for bringing your own characterizations to an imaginative plot line. Further grammatical editing can only improve your writing.

Thank you for your contribution to the world of Harry Potter Fan Fiction.

Bill wasn't a fourth year in 1986. We're set up as first years in 1981, and when we meet Bill he's a fourth year. If we go by canon, Bill is actually a year younger than the main character, which is just weird. But, yeah, Bill is canonically ten years older than Harry and a year younger than the main character in Hogwarts Mystery.

this chapter is brilliant. the best revamp of Hogwarts curriculum I have seen.

Good job! I read up to chapter 3 so far, but it won't let me review that chapter for some reason... But I wanted to say good job before I continue on

Okay, when you write 'bite' over and over again while people are speaking, it's still coming across as this excessive use of verbiage. I am certain you mean for their tones to be clipped. If every word out of everyone's mouths is always 'biting', then they wouldn't be speaking intelligibly to one another and no communication could take place until everyone has had a chance to calm down and think rationally as Snape is now asking of McGonagall.

It's simply this idea that everyone is not even civil to one another despite seeing each other on a daily basis for years, whether scholastically or familiarly. No school or home would be able to function with a staff that is constantly overreacting to everything they experience in both normal and abnormal settings.

It's sounding as though every student would be completely terrified at all times. Soften your descriptions of language because as you write them now, the Hogwarts staff is unable to control their emotions and everyone is the victim of friendly fire.

Okay, something else I keep coming across is that McGonagall uses the same descriptors over and over. Her vocabulary should be much broader than it's coming across as.

Okay, I'm not logged in for this one. Percy cannot berate Fred and George because berating someone is yelling excessively and abusively. Percy is not on a level with either Molly or Arthur and 'lecturing' or 'snapping' or something less brutal is appropriate here. For a simple interjection, Percy's reaction as written is FAR too extreme. I had to get that out because whenever I read this story, that scene takes me right out of the story and it's kind of upsetting. Percy cannot be allowed by McGonagall to berate anyone, no matter how much authority he might incorrectly think he is afforded.

I love how Hermione blows up centuries of magical tradition with a bit of Muggle scientific knowledge. It's too bad that Severus isn't in on this interview, because he might have heard of DNA himself from his Muggle home telly in the summer, and he would be making *copious* notes (and carefully not mentioning the Dark spells that would actually do what Hermione thought they should).

Neville puts his finger on a real problem for Dumbledore-it's very likely the Wizengamot would support of suit of Sirius Black's to obtain custody of Harry, and Minerva's got a dilemma-send Harry back to the Dursleys and more abuse, or defy Albus?

I sincerely enjoyed reading this story, and seeing the inner machinations of Minerva’s mind. I don’t think it was a POV I looked for but it was incredibly fun to read. I’m looking forward to the next in the series! Thanks for sharing this story with us

I think "centenarians" is the word you were looking for when discussing Bathilda. "Centurion" is a military rank. ;D

I just discovered this story yesterday, and it's wonderful. A present-tense narrative, combined with the first-person POV, is perfect for this tale, bringing it a sense of immediacy and bringing the reader into it in a way the usual third-person just can't manage. Considering how difficult it is to pull off the present-tense narrative, I would call this a masterpiece. Especially since you've totally got McGonagall's number! ;D

Re. the reviewer of 23 August, the second one that asked (rather belligerently), "Pomona, is that even a name?"

Yes, it is. She was the Roman goddess of the orchard (fruit trees), especially their cultivation and care. "Pomum" is the Latin word for "fruit."

This would be a strong chapter except for the alarming increase in English errors (too many to list). There were always some in every chapter, but this chapter is extreme. There is a reason why people who know good English are quite disturbed by frequent and severe errors. This level of incoherence repeatedly throws them right out of the story, in which they really want to stay immersed. Please have the fic competently proofed and edited. It's mostly worth it.

There is something here that is not really credible. McG did force Snape to put up with Lupin and make Wolfsbane for him, but I doubt that any power on Earth could make him call his bullies by their given names.