2. I feel that Naruto, before he was kidnapped, was a little OOC. Surprisingly, once I thought about it, Kakashi is not. From Naruto's current perspective, his sensei is an absolute asshole. I wish you would give some sort of reason for Koyuka being so nice to him, though, considering his status as a human sacrifice.

6. Most fanfics are written in limited third person, and occasionally omnipresent third. Having all of this one in first person was strange at first, because I feel like I'm not being provided enough knowledge to draw my own conclusions; I can only piggy-back off of what Naruto thinks and feels and sees. Of course, that's the point, so it's probably just a conflict of preference of my part.

7. Sign language doesn't work like spoken language does. The syntax is different- for example, "What are we going to do today" would be "today / what / we/ do" with a sign for "question" appearing either at the start or end of the phrase, or expressed through body language instead, or completely absent due to the pressence of the "what". The way you write Naruto's sign is more coherent for unknowing readers, but traded authenticity for it.

I particularly enjoyed the Ender's Game moment.

Great job on the , I love it, please update as soon as you can thanks

1: What do you think about my writing style?
cool... impresif,
2: What do you think of the way I have written the characters so far, particularly Naruto and Kakashi?
i like what you wrote about them
3: What do you predict will happen during the course of this story?
em... i don't know
4: What do you feel about this chapter's beginning, particularly the memo and the dream description?
i don't know...
5: Which of the scenes struck you as the best?
when naruto in coma's state
6: Does the first person viewpoint make improve the story?
i think this is fine
7: Do you think there is anything I can improve upon?
it's good with what you written in here... i like it...

Shame you never finished it. And what a chapter to have left things at :(

you could write a portion of it from itachis pov, unless u were trying give him a bit of a mentor/silent type air that was being given to naruto during their interactions

I like the camaraderie between Naruto and Sasuke and the fact that Sasuke still thinks the others are irritating/annoying and probably still has a hang-up about his brother (judging from Kakashi's words), but he still has the sense to act as a good leader for the good of the mission/team.

The writing is well done, however I feel that the story would be better told in third person instead of first.

Awesome! You should continue this

Hm, while walking a different path of alternate realities there is just one thing to call "bad"; This chapter is to crowded. Scratch that, it's the whole Wave Arc.
if you ever resurrect or come backfrom the dead, PM me and perhaps I can tell you more detailed what I mean.

So long

Mean cliffhanger.

Well, this chapter is a surprise egg, no?

1. Interesting
2. More than just Squadmates, but I think not yet friends.
3. Needs a bit more "DON~"
4. Your humor is fine, could be a bit darker, but that's just me ;D
5. Sarutobi gets clearance, but Kakashi comes off as somewhat... kinda OOC, don't know how to describe it fully. Perhaps it's just because I am accustomed to the Canon-Kakashi...

Ja ne!

Okay, this chapter let me laugh a lot. I hope you get to the end of this tortu- training-trip soon. Not that anything is wrong with it, it just feels so... "Filler".

The fight scenes are okay and the story is progressing nicely. 'Tis just a pity you died. C'est la vie.